Well the lemon in this chapter was very hot. Good writing. The flow had an "urgent" feel which really added.

It's a good story, but the last two chapters have seen quite OOC.

I doubt Kirika would be clinging onto Mireille's back every few seconds (does she have a complex? o.O) I also doubt Mireille would be asking to be shot over a misunderstanding. Seems like the angst is over-the-top, which is a pity, because other than that it's delivered well. :)

Nicely done. I like the flowing writing style in this chapter, and of course such a scene is where 1st person comes into its own.

great story

Excellent story! so well written. I loved Kirika's character, so sweet yet so strong and determined. They deserve each other. Congratulations, I'll read "Eclipse" ^_^

This is an excellent fic. :3

i didnt know your posted your stories on ff. lol.
i usually went to your site to read your stories. i really like the way you write and your stories are awesome and gah. i dont know what else to say.

renny-chan

That fic was excellant! i loved it. so much sadness and trouble but there a gd ole happy, funny ending. thanks for writing it!

This is one of the first Noir fanfics I read and it is still one of the best. You do a wonderful Mirielle and Kirika. The pacing, story, emotions all seem just right. Thanks for such a entertaining story:)

haha. you sure do put a lot of humor in THIS type of genre. you have great detail--er, ya, that didn't sound right. but, i was laughing in most parts because it was quite the funny plot. but i've already read your "eclipse" sequel--you HAVE to continue it. PLEASE! i wanna' know what's going out with this "anna" and that drouger-whatever guy. you have a very good plot. ya...uh, heh, you were also a bit too graphic. but i laughed on the last page for "washing the dishes". PLEASE CONTINUE your story!

*bursts out laughing* ROFL. Oh that was funny "Washing the dishes" now has a completely new meaning. Excellent, hilarious story!

AH! This was BEAUTIFUL! I really enjoyed reading. You should write more stuff like that.

Wonderful!
It was so fun reading it!!
Thank you!
now I'll read Eclipse, too!

Came back to finish reading. That was awesome. Thanks for the homage to this great couple, and for writing something so entirely plausible.

How cute. You are very good. And here I didn't think it possible to write a story involving Noir, shoujo-ai, and dishwashing. You proved me wrong, damn. Anyway, wonderful. Truly wonderful. You are very good. This is possiblly the best Noir fanfic I've read. Exquis!