 TheDonutMistress 2005-07-20 . chapter 1"Reno is grey for the cigarette smoke, poison green for the drinks and the addictions he claims he doesn't have, blue for the blue suit that hides blood – and he's blue in a more fundamental way than any of them, because they hang up their coats and take off the shoes when they come home, but he sleeps in his; she knows because she's seen him do it – sickly yellow-pink for the colour of his skin on Sunday mornings, Mako-green for the Mako-eyes, red for the hair and the whites of his eyes after drinking for too long."
My favorite part of this. It's very well worded, and I have no trouble believing this is how Elena would see Reno. Loved the whole thing! That part just stuck out for me. :) |
 Sabriel41 2005-03-29 . chapter 1"Colours" is... damn, I don't want to sound sycophantic, but it stole my breath. The combination of the colours and the textures of choice fit each character darn near perfectly. Rufus' is one of the best; "..in his crisp gauche and strict gold pencil never [tolerating] that someone else is cornering his market..." - crisp, and with a hint of mockery - your Elena plays it safe, but not without any edge.
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My only critique is the portrayal of Elena herself; in the official FF7 art, she has brown eyes. It doesn't jar your piece, and I'm sure most people won't even catch it, but for future reference...
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...which is a not-quite-subtle way of saying that I hope you keep writing, and I hope that you keep writing Turks, because I've really enjoyed what you've written so far!
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Cheers,
~Sabriel. |
 li-tzu 2005-03-29 . chapter 1this is beautiful, and severely artfully, written. arg. i love this drabble. |
 Verdot 2005-03-29 . chapter 1Hm, a sensory experience. Lovely.
~Cendrillo |
 AshCarroll aka ShadowDiva 2005-03-28 . chapter 1I really liked this. I liked how you used the colors to represent everyone. I think you did it very well with the colors you chose. They fit the personalities of the characters perfectly. Please write something else soon! The fandom needs more writers like you. :) |
 SodaPop13 2005-03-28 . chapter 1*Tear* That was beautiful! I loved it! PLZ keep writing! |
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