Great for a one-shot, its one of those 'classic humourous beginning with serious ending' type of stories.

Thanks for sharing.

Read it!, Don't understand some of the Japanese Words but it's still really good.

Hey not bad at all. You could do many 'one-shots' to fill the gap between Another Promise and Fogotten Promise. I like your writing style. Perhaps one of the best writers on here. Keep up the good work buddy. (ps update your other stories!)

Not bad

Great one-shot. Like always, keep up the good work.

Damn good one shot! Might have been a bit better if you had made it a two part to let it breathe but hey no gripes really otherwise. The story and plot were pretty cool and the humor and everything was great with the needed level of seriousness! Kudos and thanks for sharing!

That was pretty good. I think you used the word "Demonic" a bit to much, though.

NICE!

MOTOKO AND 4 EVER!

NICE!

MOTOKO AND KEITARO 4 EVER!

NICE!

MOTOKO AND KEITARO 4 EVER!

NICE!

MOTOKO AND KEITARO 4 EVER!

Wow. Another great story. Kinda of got confused so I re-read it to get everything right. Though, I would love to read a story about Motoko and Keitaro's wedding day. Or how Keitaro proposed in the first place. Oh and a side story about Naru and Kenjiro. How they met and what made them come together in the first place.

Good stories.

Woohoo, I'm the first reviewer (I think).

Anyways -- good one-shot story, nicely written and formatted, not presentation errors I noticed. It was an interesting story (Motoko is K's girlfriend in this universe, hmm?) and complete in itself. Maybe could have done with a bit more detail and so on about the battle -- what were the other girls doing at the time? More emotional buildup with regards to the Aoyama family link?

Really good fic, and I like that while Keitaro and Motoko aren't together exactly, they appear to be closer than he and Naru ever was, imo.

Not bad. A great one-shot. Keep up the good work.

Innortal