Lovely fic! Well done!

I cannot believe this only go two reviews.

This fic was wonderful, very evocative. I love how you describe Dokugakugi’s mental processes, how on one level he’s thinking about the mission and on another he’s just basking in Yaone. The line about her scent being like an offering was perfect (and I’m totally curious about what flower it is.)

“And this time it isn't because he has to, there is nothing broken here that he has to fix with himself, no terrible balance between sanity of one and safety of the other.”

Um, yes. This is what good Doku fic should explore- what’s bent in him from his childhood, and what that says about him that he *did* sleep with his mother to keep his brother safe, and what effects that has on him. I’d love to see a longer piece, exploring this idea more.

“It's different, something loud without words that rushes straight through him, rising until he aches to the ends of his bones.”

Great description of love. I’m not really a Yaone x Doku shipper, but after reading this I desperately want to see a longer fic with them (because you know Kou is no good for her).

I’ve always though that Doku and Yaone would be great characters to play with their issues re: sex, and this just whets my appetite.

I like the line about dappled sunlight. The mood of this is just lovely; how Doku knows he can’t have her and (tells himself) is okay with just being her friend.

Short and sweet. It was really really good! Never once thought about Doku thinking of Yaone in that way...it was nice, the way you wrote about him thinking they would never be. So wistful. Write more! You're good at it.

That was...so sweet. Oh, it was so adorable. Not to mention, very very well written. I have to see what else you've written. Bye.

ILoveMyGojyo

(Please keep up the good work.)