Awesome. I liked this character very much in the series and very sad when he passed away. You have a very good sense on knowing the characters in the tv series. Well done. :)

This is a great story; I love the plot. Also, I love how you worked in the mannerisms of all of the officers (Bubba shaking his head, Parker watching and listening and making suggestions, Gillespie knowing everyone's history.) They're really true to the characters from the show. I wish you would lengthen it a bit, put in more daily details, especially about the chemistry between Lonnie and Crystal. I love it though, can't wait to read more!

Great story! You did a wonderful job and I can't wait for your next one!

Another great chapter. Keep up the good work. I hope Lonnie and Crystal works this out, Lonnie deserves a good girl. **cries** Update soon.

Great story. Please update soon.

Nice second section! You're fast at work on Part 3, yes? :-)

This is my favorite line:

“Maybe a piece of you belongs in Sparta,” said Lonnie. “Maybe all of you belongs in Sparta.”

Hee! Cute!

Great second part. I am really getting into this story. Great work so far.

Hi!

What a lovely beginning to your story! I'm doubly curious now, because so much seems wrapped up by the end of the first chapter. What do you have planned for the next?

Inquiring minds wanna know! :-)

Anne

Great story. I always love a good "Heat" story and you said on Yahoo groups that you had written one, I'm glad I came to check it out.

Well, you have good writing form and the plot worked. It's a pretty good story overall, for those who are Sue tolerant. Good job.