That was just, so, breathtakingly brilliant. It made so much sense and it was so original and dude, the circling back to the bookshelves etc ended the piece so wonderfully.

So, I'm finally getting around to my reviews ... hehe. Why didn't you tell me you had something new, silly girl? *sigh* Anyway.

I really liked this - the situations brought on by this story was quite unexpected and it's a future scenario that's strange and somewhat detached. I think that's how I felt throughout this whole thing - detachment. The mood is set - it's sterile and rings of an accepted finality. Does that make sense?

Maybe not.

Anyway - I liked how you told this story. I liked the sparse conversation and the references to Literature - because that's who they were, who they are. I think we all compare ourselves to characters in fiction some time. My favorite analogy? I loved Rory as Daisy. Luce and I were talking about this last night, and I thought it was so cool that you brought this up in your fic.

Good going, Ari. This was quite the interesting read. You never fail to amaze. Thanks for writing it.

Wow! This was amazing...and so original!
There is an overall sadness that never leaves the story, but I'm so glad that in the end she finally realizes what is in front of her eyes and that she can be herself with him.

I love it, Ari! :)

Aw Ari, it was so cute! Hee.

You had me scared though, I was like, "Are they going to be together? Or not?" Heh.

I was iffy about that guy.. how dare he look at Jess' Rory. Even if she is acting fake.

Love how it ended, just right. :-D

aw. cute.

How very E.E. Cummings of you, Ari. Today seems to be the day for stories that get understood in the gut without making sense in the head at all.

I like that it ends happily, in a weird sort of way, without feeling really happy...because the story isn't really a happy one.

I like...hum. That they don't fight. I don't like how strained they are, but...I like that they don't fight, and that maybe it'll be okay.

And I like that she can come home to him and not be false--we all need someone with whom we can be as dressed up as we need to and then let our hair down. Someone who is just as much there when we're our real, private selves as when we're our world selves. We need private people. And I think they have that--or they will--and I like that very much.

Brava.

Ari! *squeals*
This was amazing!
I love your writing. It is so unique. Hee.
Ugh, that guy bothered me! *pout*
Hee, I love how it ended.
Great job! =)

Hey,

Amazingly worked out and written.

Bye, smile :-)

Oh...
Words aren't enough to express my praise, here... The imagery is perfect. The tilting bookshelves, the chipping paint, the literature references, the way they need each other to function.
Beautiful. You, my dear, never disappoint.
:)
M.

Hi!
I must tell you: this story blew me away... it is very well written, with a lot of suspense and the ending we've all been waiting for ;)

greetz!

*squeals* You deserve a better review than the one that I'm about to give.

First off, wonderful story. It's real. I say that too much, but I believe that all extraordinary writers make it real, whether it be in fan fiction, on the tube, or on the big screen. The emotions are just there... they come out to you - you don't have to READ the story for them, read in a more metaphorical sense.

Second, interesting transitions. I like how you did it. It was very unique, and it added to the tone and overall feel of the story.

Third, excellent focus. There were no tangents. Nothing was blown out of proportion. Even with another character, the focus was on Rory and Jess. We both know that could be a bad thing in some stories, but not this one. Obviously, lol.

Overall, you did a great job. Everything came together in a satisfactory manner... but I'm sounding very cold and teacher-ish right now. Like always, awesome work.

--Kellie