OH MY GOSH I CAN'T WAIT TO READ THE SEQUEL
IM JUST SO EXCITED
AND ALL IN ALL THIS WAS A VERY GOOD STORY/BOOK I READ THE WHOLE THING IN A DAY (BUT ITS BECAUSE I READ REALLY FAST) :'P

cool story

Great story!
:D

This is a really good story, so far..
Well it is very descriptive, but overly done. If you know what i mean? Thiink more clearly on the plot. It does seem a bit rushed.. You have to take time and think things out before writing.. oor typing i guess. Your sentences are really good but at the same time it seems a bit repeatitive.. just trying to help. ! (:

this is for chapter 5
why ddnt either rider speak the ancient language to lift the stone?
just pointing it out!

I like it

good story but to do magic you have to say the ancient langauge

once you finish writing it you should definetely get it published

I'm going back and reading some of these chapers again, and I like how you have the strong difference between male and female here, like how Marie gets emotionaly hurt really easy, and Brom is like 'buck up.'
And when Eragon and Marie heard Brom in the woods, and Eragon has Marie get behind him. It's realistic. Good job.

OMG! Best story like friggin' on Fanfiction! I loved it! WoW! but i kept saying Orophers 'Oh-fur'.
But that was great! I was amazed at the last to chapters. If anyone can end a story well, it you. You rock and I can't wait to read more of your work!

Wow, that was just...amazing! You are a good writer!^^,

Yay! i lurved this story! i also read KittenofShadows trilogy and i think both of yours are really good. i can't wait for the last book to come out so i can read it! the suspense is KILLING me why doesn't CP just finish it! Jeez or at least tell us the name or color!God! okay enough of my ranting i'm of to read ur next story toodles!ESW

Oh goodie! This is going to be interesting!
ER
P.S I'm only up to chapter 2 so far! :)

OMG!! I started crying!! This story is very good.

You. Stink. That's the only word for your writing skills. Get some cajones, or stay away from writing.

Just spare us.

I think most people would agree.

And all the 'ur story rcks keep writin' reviews? They are from people just as sad and pathetic as you. They can't even bother to make any constructive criticism. I'm not mocking them for liking it, but for their inability to make any useful criticism to you as a writer.

To reinforce my point here, from the bottom of the review screen itself:
"It is extremely helpful to use this opportunity to comment on an aspect of the story that can be improved. A well rounded critique is often the most rewarding tool for the writer."
I don't see, "Say you like the story and that's it." there.

And I'm sure you'll bring up the 'What's constructive about your critcism argument'. Look at my profile, and that's where you'll find my reasons and my critcism.

And I'm sure I'll get a PM or Reply soon, so bring it on.