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| meow 2008-05-09 ch 1, anon. | abuseIt was a good plot but the writting looked as if it was done by a nine year old. No detail no fillers just straight to the point, which some times can be good not so much in this case. Well it wasn't bad |
| Deep October 2006-10-29 ch 7,  | abuseAfter reading your other story I just had to read this one as well. I like the way your stories deal with the past in the present (that makes sense in my head, I hope you know what I mean). Feels good with a happy ending too. But as usual I'm gonna suggest you to write more desriptions. Like, what are they wearing? How do they look? What are they thinking? Where are they, how does the place look? Assume we have no idea who they are, and your story will be even better than it already is. -thumbs up- |
| Vampiric Phantoms 2006-05-05 ch 7, | abuseThis was really good. |
| getdeleated 2006-04-22 ch 7, | abuseMore applause, Tom makes a nice victim doesn't he? A pretty victim too. ~Eva |
| oceleste 2005-06-26 ch 7, | abuseI really like 21 jump street, I love Tom (and of crouse Johnny Depp) and your story is really nice... I spreak French and I'm not fluent in English but I've understood almost everything ! "Félicatitons" ;-) |
| lucy 2005-04-22 ch 7, anon. | abuseI really enjoyed reading this - it was of a good length and it was very exciting, and really well written. Thanks! |
| Vianne Lee 2005-04-08 ch 7, | abuseNice story. It was a little short however, and perhaps a little more description would have been nice. Otherwise, great job! |
| daizia 2005-04-08 ch 7, | abuseGreat story - bringing the past to the present and tying up a "loose end" - or a "loose cannon", in Brock Harding's case! ;) |
| daizia 2005-04-08 ch 4, | abuseYikes! I've had a knife held to my throat before and it is just...yikes yikes yikes! I really do like how you put in the flashbacks, by the way. Good way of letting us into Tom's mind. :) And it as nice of him checks on his mom, too..so sweet. :) |
| daizia 2005-04-08 ch 2, | abuseI like the flashback - that's a nice touch! I'm really enjoying this story :) |
| DeppDRACOmaniac 2005-04-04 ch 7, | abuseGood story. I kind of wish it was longer though. You might want to explain why he left Judy at the phone booth. Also every once in a while the words run together. But overall a very good story! |
| felix 2005-03-31 ch 6, anon. | abuseI LOVE IT! ^_^ update soon, i cant wait! BLUEBERRY MUFFINS! |
| tree 2005-03-31 ch 5, anon. | abuseAlright! Great suspense. Moving along at a good quickened pace. Promise you won't keep us waiting for more!! |
| aggieatheart 2005-03-30 ch 1, anon. | abuseGhostwriter, I am glad you started another story. I loved The Secrets We Keep. I will be checking back daily to see how this one turns out! :) |