|Reviews for Portrait Painting|
| AnnaMNR 3/19/13 . chapter 1
| Brother Mirtillo 11/1/12 . chapter 1
I read this and a few of your other works some time ago. It’s only now that I can express just how much this story proves that you can write layered dialogue for layered characters like nobody’s business.
The banter and verbal sparring? The references to canon and timeline? The tender descriptions of the people, clothing, physical sensations? Those are ground-level skills here. (Props for them nonetheless. They’re relevant, accurate, lightly-paced and conducive to the upheaving impact of the unguarded moments to follow.)
What’s truly outstanding are that you’ve kept Kaiba’s and Pegasus’ standards as well as their exceptions. For example, Kaiba’s entrance to the studio affirms that Kaiba antagonizes jokers by being businesslike, and Pegasus antagonizes standoffish folks by joking. That’s just what they do. But you realized that, given the choice, neither of them would be in each other’s presence. The reason they’re doing so now indicates just how good of a reason they each had for arranging this situation.
Of course, it’s only after rereading that I realized just how significant Pegasus’ motivation was. Even so, you foreshadowed it (or at least stayed true to it) by having him latch onto certain bits of the conversation. I’m mainly thinking of his pause in their phone conversation, but the pause towards the end of the sketch stands out a little differently. It reminded me that Kaiba never heard Anzu read that story, and I doubt he ever heard it later. Damn straight, he wouldn’t hear it from Pegasus. But when I reread, that sniffle made me wonder if Pegasus was actually sympathizing with Kaiba. Perhaps there was a slight wavering in resolve. If so, it was fleeting, seeing as Pegasus became “inspired” later. To feel compassion and pull so cold a move in spite of that – no, *because* of that – that’s underhanded squared.
This doesn’t even go into the other ways you recalled that even such well-known characters as these have idiosyncrasies in their reactions – Pegasus’ gets derailed by the reintroduction of his Eye, Kaiba’s stoicness vanishes at each incarnation of the painting, etc. It describes them from so many sides and surprised me into fascination all the way.
I realize this story's well past yesterday's news by now. It deserves this anyway. Bravissimo.
| mofalle 5/12/11 . chapter 1
Absolutely beautiful, the imagary brought tears to my eyes. I thought you characterized Seto and Pegasus well.
| Maggie 12/28/10 . chapter 1
Too awesome for words.
| yllimilly 12/8/10 . chapter 1
Oh, Pegasus... You are cruel.
Very well written piece.
| Havelock Vetinari 5/27/10 . chapter 1
...Wow. That last line... That was Pegasus's real reason for doing that, wasn't it?
| JillRG 1/11/10 . chapter 1
I almost didn't dare to hope from the description that this would be what I thought it was!
Brilliant! Every word!
| Setep Ka Tawy 1/7/10 . chapter 1
You - are - BRILLIANT.
Honestly, this has to be one of the most poignant and inspired stories about Seto that I've ever read. The combination of passion and humor was overwhelmingly beautiful. And you got both Kaiba's and Pegasus's characters spot on - personality, dialogue, everything. I don't even know how to fully express my awe. All I can say is, I'm off to read more of your work. You've definitely inspired me to continue writing my own Seto fics.
| Destructo-Bot 7/15/09 . chapter 1
Oh wow. Yu-Gi-Oh fanfiction that doesn't suck? that's a rarity. This was beautiful, well-written and all in all a joy to read.
| LuoLiBei 4/30/09 . chapter 1
Wow, great, I loved Pegasus' evil ulterior motive at the end. It is a dangerous thing to be obsessed with a dead person. :)
| LostOzian 4/20/09 . chapter 1
Ominous ending, comparing Kisara to Cecilia. Most of us forget about Cecilia because she was a hastily thrown together explanation at the end of Duelist Kingdom. We forget that Pegasus really misses her and he wouldn't move on so easily.
At least, I forget that. Very good job on this one! I likes it! -LostOzian
| InTheShadowOfSignificance 6/22/08 . chapter 1
I'm not sure I can find words to do this story justice, I love it...it's just utterly perfect...
| LullabyForTheLost 9/20/07 . chapter 1
Wow this was a beautiful story and the ending was beautiful.
"Look long and hard, Kaiba-boy, he thought. Admire her beauty. Long to hear the sound of her voice. Reach out to touch her and feel what it is to see but not to hold. After all... misery loves company."
| ReaperRain 8/16/07 . chapter 1
Oh, that was beautiful. I loved your characterisation, and especially that chilling ending. You really are quite an accomplished author - you could do this for a living easily.
| anaraz 2/2/07 . chapter 1
Pegasus was great