I agree with everyone else here, the rhythm is *fabulous*!
I have to say that the movie has converted me into a *rabid* E/C 'Shipper, and you've done a very good job at capturing Christine's compassion for Erik here.
In short, I like very much.

Oh, and by the way, from "Watch my eyes...' to "Forgotten the wine..." looks like an hourglass!

Regards,
AquilaLorelei

Wow!

[[Taking a break after reading A Solo ;) ]]

Well, first of all, I love the meter and rhythm of your poem. For the most part, it seemed like you maintained a consistent syllable count for each line throughout the poem. I also really liked the repetition of "you and I, I and you," and "tick tock you, tick tock, I." It works in really well with the rhythm.

On the second time reading it.. ah hah! I get it! The ending, especially, tipped me off. "Open your eyes." ahh.. now I get it. :) I'm guessing that the first half of the second stanza is sort of like Christine's version of MOTN, minus all of the music.

Very suspenseful. I loved the "tick tock". It had my heart in my throat the entire time and it's nice to see a piece about Christine casting spells of her own

I've never been one for prose, but this is amazing. You portrayed both of them very well, and the repetition adds beautifully to the piece. You've got a real knack. Keep it up!

That was a wonderful poem. As I read it out loud it just semed to roll off your tounge. It was superb, but who were the people? Christine adn Erik? or Christine and Raoul? I liked it anyways.