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| Nora 2005-09-21 ch 3, anon. | abuseHey its good keep goin. |
| Ginny 2005-05-21 ch 2, anon. | abuseBeing uneducated wouldn't bother Adam, he could teach her speak like a lady and introduce her to literature, plays, etc. But, sorry, can't see Adam being attracted at all to a woman who cusses like a sailor and wears pants and acts like a man. I can't see any of them attracted to a woman like that. Also, Adam would not accuse her right of the bat of lying about the child being his son, knowing that they had made love at that time. He would have heard her out. |
| cybernaut 2005-05-14 ch 2,  | abuseIt was good until the part "She could and did shoot faster and straighter than Little Joe (as shown by the four dead men she had left behind her)." What is with this trend of depicting women more macho than the Cartwrights? It emasculates them (Cartwrights) and the story starts losing credibility. |
| Suncat 2005-04-06 ch 1, anon. | abuseIntriguing story with a lot of "back-story" to it. There are some typo/grammar type errors. Jace's dialect is hard for me to read but you did a great job with Jason's baby talk. More, please. |
| cybernaut 2005-04-02 ch 1, | abuseIntriguing, original concept. You laid it out well. Now where would you be going with this? |
| RedPiper 2005-03-31 ch 1, anon. | abuseThe story has potential, but you really need to fix the typos and grammatical errors. I understand that your dialogue is meant to reflect a regional accent, but there are other errors throughout the story. Is there more? It is going to be interesting to see why Adam was attracted to someone seemingly uneducated (his on-air interests were all fairly intelligent, educated women). |