I like it! Wish the story was longer though. Please write more!

what's with the bold letters in the begining (did i spell it right? i am bad a speller, hey don't blame me, i'm still in elementry school.) and i like nachos too LOL

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u r most definitely crazier than me which is a miracle in itself anyways do keep up the good work!

i luv it very interesting i hope u update soon

This is interesting. I hope you write more.

please please update soon! its a really great stury!

hey hey. you said you would update tomorrow3! it has been one year already. planning to update soon!

just because i want to: POKE!

Umm...pretty good. I like the idea of using a different vocabulary, but just don't use too much!

When's the fluffiness comin'? :3

Good job

this was really good hurry up and write more PLEASE

please please update as soon as possible!

You know what this made me do?

-Tigeriskitty: You know you’d know if I used incorrectly conjugated Japanese terms. . . Don’t lie. . . You’d know (wide eyes) and then the Nacho King would come and steal Kyo’s boxers and devour them.-

I snort laughed at it! and its all your fault!

Wallows on the ground in self pitty...and what does grawl mean? its it the noise the racahog makes? is it?

runs off screaming grawl

Interesting..._ great start... try to put all your Japanese romaji at the end ... it makes it kinda' distracting in the middle of the story. Other than that though, it was awesome! _Yeay, for Yuya x Kyo pride! b_d

More! - It's really good at the moment! Well the arguments between Kyo and Yuya! I'm super curious as to what the future holds for this story! - Update soon!

Kakoi! RoguesHeart-san! Hope you'll finish the following chapter quickly! I'll wait for it! _