|Reviews for Dark, So Very Dark|
| Kai's kitty 4/15/06 . chapter 1
poor Kai...I think that this fic is a good one if you continue,may be Tyka or Brooklyn/Kai
| Bluestray 1/3/06 . chapter 1
plz write more in the future!
| Fail Haruno 9/4/05 . chapter 1
:( Poor Kai... He thinks he's alone, even though Tyson is watching and frusterated that he can't do anything. Poor Kai...
Either way, good story as always. Nice perspective of Kai's thoughts. (Was 'persoective the right word? Was it even spelt right? O.o ) -;
| Kinaihiri 8/9/05 . chapter 1
_ Awesome. Just awesome. I love the description and...everything. You're a great writer.
| Death Angel's Shadow 5/12/05 . chapter 1
its ok...totally love it...
| 4rmtheashes 4/22/05 . chapter 1
| Garowyn 4/5/05 . chapter 1
Halfway through you changed into Kai's POV, around this line:
[Kai struggled back up; he must fight Tyson again…]
And then suddenly Kai himself was "talking".
[Brooklyn stared at me. His eyes looked evil. Like Zeus’ eyes.]
I was a little confused for a second. You should keep it either all Kai's POV from his perspective, or descriptions of Kai's POV, just to be consistent.
You also should go deeper into Kai's POV and describe other feelings he may have been assailed with. It is too short.
Other than that, I didn't find any spelling or grammatical errors. The oneshot in general wasn't bad at all. Good start.
(This is not a flame)
| Chibi Amo 4/1/05 . chapter 1
O_O KOOL! FAV! _