 GoethFisheth 2005-04-12 . chapter 1good job for a first slash (not that i'm an expert or anything). i like the idea... BUT, just a pointer: Draco, though he's weak, he doesn't act like a girl (i mean, you didn't totally make him seem like a girl, but throwing himself into Harry's arms is... not masculine even if he is gay). but other than that, and the tips from the other reviewer, it was good. :) keep writing, please! |