That story was very sweet and touching. Love the idea, since it's so unique! Your charecters are interesting, you have a pretty accurate portrayl of the originals, and the brother fluff is just so...so...so...AW! ^_^

I dunno if you still have your editor or not, but he/she wasn't really doing their job. A good bit of mispells, plenty of times when words could have been subsituted or taken out completely, that sort of thing. Seriously, this isn't a flame, but a friendly critique. Not that I have much room to talk, since my own fiction has the same problems...-_-;

At any rate, I would also like to add that I love how you used a combo of anime and manga, and that you actually knew what you were speaking of when you did! Thank you! It is beyond aggrivating to read a story with inaccurate information because you just can't get into it.

Now to continue reading your other stuff!

I really, really enjoyed that. I like the idea of Mokuba being born as someone else to reverse the death of his mother in labor with him. I've always entertained a reincarnation theory that followed that logic. And, of course, Seto learning a certain tolerance of Yuugi and the gang and his uncondition devotion to Mokuba is adorable. One thing I was wondering though, "For those who have never read the manga in the first season when Mokuba battles against Yugi in capsule monster chess. Well in it you never see Mokuba’s eyes. His bangs are that long."
With that last statement, are you refering to the first season or the manga because in the manga, despite Mokuba's long bangs you can see his eyes and he introduces himself as "Seto's little brother" upon Yuugi being suprised at hearing Mokuba's friends address him as "Kaiba", which in the next volume Mokuba corrects with "I didn't tell you my full name last time, it's Mokuba; Mokuba Kaiba".

Lol, I know this story was written a couple years back. But I just had to leave a review. :)
Very nice! I love that you kept the focus where it should be. This really was a story that was focused on Seto and Mokuba's relationship as brothers. It was lovely how you ended it with the two.

I can hardly wait to read the sequel. Keep up the good work.

Yay! He won! Very exciting duel! Awesome!
^_^

Wow! Such twists! I'm seriously rushing to read the rest! This story is awesome! ^_^

Very interesting chapter!
I am much looking forward to reading the rest of this story.
This far it was absolutely wonderful with proper characterisation and a solid and very good manner of writing.^_^

sorry it too me so long but i have been getting side track but i will try and read the next chapter very soon.

I want to tell u i loved the story. my reviews go for the whole story not just the chapter. I prefer to review the whole thing. I hope u write more stories.

Zoey

That was a good story ^_^ Took me awhile to finish reading it though, but hey! Better late than never :p heehee.

The fun fired, blood splattered, the image of what was shot was not seen.
As a fellow writer, I love to get contructive criticism, it helps me. I just wanted to let you know about the "fun" Thank you!

this is a great story. I have to finish the rest later.

I like this story a lot.

That was awesome, you write with a lot of talent. I am a bit short on time, so I cannot read it till the last chapter you wrote. But I honestly like it, and I will make sure to read all the chapters.

OMG! What an awesome story. That was the best thing I have ever read. Great job!

27 chapters... That's a good number.

I like the part about Gozaburo hating animals. It sounds like something he would do.

I might be wrong... but that dream kind'a sounds like the beginning of a new story. How else would you explain this?
“Mokuba’s in danger! Save your brother, Seto Kaiba...save him!” said a voice he could not recognize. “Save him!”