If you haven't decided to give up on this story, please continue! I have fallen in love with it! I love Andromeda, and the drabbles with Draco and Haldir; I can SO see them killing each other. I also think that them knowing about Tolkien was an interresting twist; Sirius being there too. Will they ever meet up? This is me hoping you'll update this story. Continue, puwes! *Puts on a puppy-dog face*

yes new part, get more draco and gettig even with his Elf.

Keep teh parts coming

Excellent! It is rare to see a good LOTR and HP
crossover.

Just one suggestion: I think the word is "talan"
for the dwelling place in the trees, and "talon" for
the claws on a bird.

Yes a new chapter, Haldir is going to wish he hadn't treated Draco so bad when he gets his wand back or something else that can act as a wand.

Draco doesn't need a wand to make potion, how big of a chance is there he would be able to get all kinds of ingredients at Caladwen’s talan when he goes there.

Keep the chapters coming.

The addition of Sirius was great and intrigued me. This hooked me; it's a great idea of what happened to Sirius after he fell through the curtain!

I think what would help make this story feel real is if you gave more insight into Tolkien's importance. Were his books popular in the wizarding world? Was there a part of ancient magic that existed in the world, something maybe Dumbledore had once mentioned to Andromeda?

- LtSonya

This particular chapter really got going for me after Draco woke up. That's when you get closest to the characters emotions, whereas Haldir didn't mean much to me as a character. He was just there for plot, moving the story forward instead of adding to the tension.

Draco felt real to me when he started acting like he does in the HP books. The only thing is you jump around when you're in his POV. First he wakes up and is upset about his cloak. But then he sees an evil. There's no fear or surprise, just notices her ageless face. If he's been unconscious for awhile now, just had all those terrible things happen to his parents, seeing some strange woman (though pretty) is going to cause some kind of reaction. And that's what I need you to do. Again, this is where internal POV comes into play: A woman stood above him, supporting his back. What was going on? He reached for his wand, but it wasn't in his pocket. No, wait. His clothes were gone. The panic rose, the same as that night one month ago...'

Something like that allows readers to see into the charaters. We get a feel for what's happening and also their emotions.

Another little point - Draco brings up Middle-Earth and how it was made up by a doddering wizard (at least, I think it's Draco that said this). But we never once see him make this connection, instead it just comes out of nowhere. I need to see him make this realization before he says something.

Haldir is a good character to keep Draco in line. I hope to see you explore this more.

- LtSonya

You've done a good job so far mixing Potter and LoTR. It's never easy to do in fanfics, especially with all the high expectations. I would have liked a little more exposition - or at least dialogue to explain how Andromeda and Draco got to this point. Not so much about being in Middle-Earth, but how Draco ended up with Andromeda. This goes more for the prologue than this chapter. Draco just seemed to get mad at Andromeda for no real reason - some kind of explanation or at least Andromeda's thoughts. She's not phased at all that Draco pulled his wand on her. Given his father it might not be surprising, but she's not even sad that Draco is going down that path. These thoughts and internal dialogue will help me connect with her more and the story.

One other thing. When Ainion finds Andromeda, he tells Elladan and Elrohir to take her in and then tell Elrond. But it's Ainion who informs Elrond what's going on. And who's point of view are we in? At first it seemed like Ainion but then it moved to a more narrative form.

Not a bad start thought.

- LtSonya

Keep 'm coming.

Can't wait to see if Draco can survive without his wand, create an emergency one or replacement. Or even find something else that could be used as a wand by draco, gets his hands on one of the rings.

Even if D only heard the story once, he got brains and should remember some key parts of them, those that were the most ridicul once.

So Andromeda gets to meet Sirius and drags him off in search of Draco, o boy is he going to like that.

Any new parts coming? looking forward to see how the elfs are measure up to wand magic and Draco gets out of the trouble he got himself

Go looking for Draco, maybe een have to clean up the mess and trouble his causes, nothing that isn't reversable by a counter charm.

Get Draco to know The Book by memory and use it against Haldir, there have t be some juice secrets he wouldn't want to come out into the public.

This one has a fantastic start. like it very much.

Poor Haldir when Draco is through with him, get Draco to use his wand to change his halve of the room.

Get more chapters out soon.

Great story.Can't wait til the next chappie.YAH!

He's SO staying in Middle Earth! Let's put a stop to any such nonsense with the other Hogwarts culprits, tyvm!

Well, you know me dear. I'm a sucker for slash pairings. A dwarf wouldn't be having with his airs. An elf might put up with him only because he's cute and young and probably highly amusing.

This is interesting! Do I detect a hint of Elrond/Andromeda or am I an idiot?

Keep your spirits up- this is a good start.

~Lady of Light~