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| Blue-Inked Frost 2005-04-10 ch 3,  | abuseNow this is scary. I like the characters you chose to fill the particular roles. Again, this could have been expanded on; it's a fragment of a work rather than a work in its own right. I think the first name 'Elspeth' would have been of more use here, actually, considering a gypsy might well call herself Lady Illusion. Yeah, and yay for kid!Ace and Sparx. :) |
| Blue-Inked Frost 2005-04-10 ch 2, | abuseI like this one; my favourite, possibly because it's semi-serious and involves Elspeth. You have one "Protiace" and about five "Phoebaces" though; you might have watched that consistency, especially in a fic this short. While the one-shot works all right, it reads so much more like an outline of a fusion than a fusion itself. It could've been longer... |
| Blue-Inked Frost 2005-04-10 ch 1, | abuseInteresting take on the fairy-tale, and the ending was cute. :) "Spiders"--should not be capitalised unless they are the Spiders Of Dredd Castle or the equivalent. Yay for Mark, Chuck, and Kat as fairies. "to caress his lips with her own"--I know the word 'kiss' can be overused, but this isn't an improvement. Nice drabble. :) |
| CheleLiz 2005-04-08 ch 3, | abusefunny, funny. very well thought out though. i do have to question the last one though - but i suppose i was warned |
| Scarabbug 2005-04-06 ch 3, | abuseHm... Didn't see this one coming... ah Disney, You never let us down, and neither do you Lightning Flash. Okay, you're right about that last one: very scary. (You know it's late at night here and now I'm going to be having nightmares.) Seriously, this rocks! Very funny and... well just weird. Specially the first chapter: you know what I'm like about Sparx. You seriously have to keep writing this! *Scarab cracks up laughing at this point and has to leave* |
| hyperpsychomaniac 2005-04-06 ch 1, | abuseLol! Very well done! Sparx dreaming about kissing Ace? You never know!:) And I loved the fairy Chuck waving his magical laptop! |