This is good. The descriptions of the weather are beautiful. I get the feeling that these will start of humorous and become more serious as the chapter progresses.

When Ineluki was talking about the men coming on their ships with their iron I got goosebumps! Goosebumps! I don't *get* goosebumps reading fan fiction, let me tell you. Maybe I should read MSAT...

And who is Hakatri? It's important, I think, for me to know.