its not horrible, it just ends really suddenly. maybe a bit more description of sasukes homecoming.

Nice!

This was kinda cute. I liked it.

But I have a kinda stupid question. What is Slash? I know I should know this by now, but I can never figure that out. I managed Canon, but this has me lost. If you could answer, I'd be in your debt :P

I thought it was good! xD!

no critique for you dear this was cute and well written

i would like more of it though i felt you ended it to abrubtly

which is probably what you were going for anyway

but yeah

loved it

honey from what i've read i think that i'll have a heart attack if anybody told me that you've written an angst story because deary i don't know if you know this or not but you honey have got the purest heart ever

love

looli_

nope! Another great fic! I'm reading your profile, and going through all the stories, si you'll get a few reviews from me! But i think this one is really sweet, and i loved it! great stuff!

Sometimes weird moods make the best fictions. I loved this, even if it was short, it was still very good n_n

Have a great day, I love you!

odd, very odd, but very cute all at the same, i liked it

sorry, m'dear. No criticsm for you. XP shor tand sweet.. i love drabbles

Not bad... the grammar looks good.

x3 Can;t wait ofr the next chapt! Good work though _

Ja Ne

Well, you're a little harsh in your self-criticism, I've most certainly read much worse. Plus, it's not really long enough to have the chance to be horrible, so no worries there.

I would think that a little more detail about Naruto's reaction might be nice, and the last two lines were a bit abrupt, but sometimes that's what the author is going for.

Um, didn't mean to be too critical, cause this is by no means bad, and I definitely think you could work through this and make it really good. Was this a one shot? I wasn't really sure.. but anyway, not bad, and I hope you keep writing.

wow... that was... short. and highl unexpected O_O;. ...there's gunna be more, right? *blatantly ignores 'one-shot' sign* ; right? 'cause, dude, you really can't leave such a great intro there. you built everything up so nicely and then... bam.

give me more. i demand it XD.