Grammatically, I should clarify:
1) "Enough" should be in quotations in the fourth line to emphasize that I'm trying to say that it's impossible to be satisfied that one's work conveys reality (or what one can perceive as reality) completely accurately.

2)"This is a refreshing change to what most fanfics are: very vibrant and satisfying as a one-shot" would be better said as "This is a refreshing change from what most fanfics are not; very vibrant and satisfying as a one-shot"

Do forgive the double-post; it's about 1:00 AM and I'm still bowled over from reading that ficlet.

And being like an Impressionist is a good thing in my world, so no worries :)

Wow.
Screw drawing/painting/illustrating.
You can do way more with these words than anyone can with some Photoshop or paints or whatever can.
As for the "good enough, true enough" - well, really, that's the point. Nothing ever WILL be enough represented in writing or in art - that's part of the tension in any work. I might be parroting Magritte, but I believe it all the same.

This is a refreshing change to what most fanfics are: very vibrant and satisfying as a one-shot. THIS is the kind of stuff that drives me to keep poring through fanfic lists even though my mind is going numb with how vapid or cliched some/most of them sound. There's only one bit of this that felt a little overwrought, and that was the "infinitely heavier" line. A mere blot on the canvas you've painted so wonderfully.

I love that you ended with a question (actually the trio of questions). It's a lovely device and I smile whenever I see it used.

If you were a painter, you would SO be an Impressionist :).

On an unrelated note, you so need to get a dA so I can pimp out your stories from there and add all that I've read to my faves :3 (in case I'm stupid and missed the fact that you DO have one, my username is Nethrion there - stop by and say hello :D)

I’m glad I get to forget the smell of this room. There is a dog smell, that and onions. I happen to be allergic so it makes me feel sick.

You know though, I did almost die thank you! I didn’t really realize I was holding my breath, and when I did I gasped and almost fell out of this chair.

I really enjoyed the detail, being able to visualize the trees, the wind, the was the air must taste. So crisp and light. (I hope it’s low calorie….lol just kidding. It’s a present right? That way it don’t count. *winks* Chouji logic!) I could just imagine it all, I love the outdoors, it’s so free.

Have you ever went hiking through the wilderness and found a waterfall with a lake in it? I have, and it was the coolest water, I almost froze to death just swimming in it. I guess I didn’t really breath until I laughed at the part where we were watching Gaara and the you said, (I quote) “You don’t know, though, because he does not look at you.”

Still I managed to forget to breath…again…(yay me…) but cracked up laughing when I realized at the bottom of the page you asked if I would breath. (I kinda had too, it’s hard to laugh with no air…)

Congrats and sorry this is so long!

- B. Rae

p.s. Sorry if I keep bring up 'the middle ground' on you.

a LITTLE 2 peotic dont u think?

i haven't even read the whole thing yet and i know it's good..hell i barly even read the begining and i knew it was good

Ironically enough, for a moment I think I forgot to breathe.

No dialogue, no action, no thoughts, no movement, nothing but a description of a scene, but it was carried out so beautifully.

I've read stories that have lasted for hundreds of thousands of words and failed to say even half of what this little moment said.

Thank you.

W-wow. That's...one of the most beautiful things I've ever read-And yet, it wasn't exactly /beautiful/. It was perfect, it was modest, it was honest, it was everything in between, because that's the way it was intended.
The affect you got of me was a rare one, and it was pleasant. Nothing was out of place, and nothing too shocking. I felt an equal amount of all emotion put into one bowl, and not one ever superseding the others.
You truly are an amazing writer.

Second person was the only way you could write this, and it worked out just the way it was supposed to.

*breathes deeply and sighs* It was beautiful. I have no idea if it was from the descriptions or my over active imagination (probably both) but I could smell it, I could see it, I was there. It was one of the most beautiful things I've ever read, and I read a lot. Congratultions, you put the words I scrawl on paper to shame. I am humbled.

-Peace (and not much else)
-Alex, the strange

beautiful.

(Screaming)...(A breath)...
(More screaming)... Oh my gosh. Are you a professional writer? You have an amazing form and the feelings are perfect! How on earth did you write this? You are amazing! !

wow. that was.. really good. Your a very talented author. I envy you. Keep writing.

duh . . duh (sputters somewhat before blinking in total speechlessness) omg. . . that is a beautiful picture. i'd like to try to draw it but i know i could never do it justice. (sighs) so beautiful, are you going to write more? if so, update soon, kk? much love to your genius!!

Second-person perspective works surprisingly well. Nice.

aboslutely magnificent!

That...was the coolest thing I've ever read and, believe me, I've read a lot. You are a master.