loved this story. it was one of my fav

wicked cool!

~Amanda~

great

I hate you! You should do a sequel that was so mean!


Oh and it was a bit confusing in the beginning, so just be careful when your writing a character young and old, sometimes I didn't know who was who and where was where.

Good job, I wish you would write more though, more to their relationship.

i'll read the rest later. love the story and can't wait to finish reading it

one little thing...they would be meeting for dinner not lunch

how sad. ya know this could have ended differently if you had made it so that Neville was the "Chosen One" so to speak

A pretty good story, although it seemed rather rushed to me. Also, in some chapters, Remus (the younger one) was referred to as 'Lupin', and I don't understand why.

NO! Aww, sad, sad ending!

Interesting! I'm intrigued. Slightly confused. But intrigued. It feels like the story is moving very fast. Like you're cramming more story into each chapter then you should (I can't tell if that made any sense but I can't figure out how to write it better). Sorry if that's insulting. :)

Cheers

Like I said for the last chapter, it was abrupt. I like how Hermione had visions of the future. It was kind of hard to tell what was in real life towards the end though (because of the quotes). Remus's character has definite potential, I can tell you could do something awesome with that. But, none of the charcters have a really developed personality (does that make sense??)The ending is sort of sudden (but cool). If you add a bit more (do dare I say) detail, it could be something incredible.

If I sound insulting, I'm sorry. I just want to help. :)

Cheers

I like the idea of your story. It's original and refreashing. The only thing I would suggest is adding a bit more transitional detail. It was really good in the first two chapers, lots of detail but then it sort of tapered off. Without it, the flow is sort of choppy and abrupt. It just need a bit more transition. :)

Cheers

I read your story! And I liked it! Interesting idea. I really like the end.

Cool story read more later must go watch Sabrina the teenage witch caoi
TC

I dont think they shold have gone back, i think yo shud've had it tha things stayed changed then u could write another thing about what life was like later on