 Rosie 2006-05-20 . chapter 1 It seresly sucks. |
 La-noob 2005-08-23 . chapter 1Its okay a little short...sorry but not good enough to be a fav...Keep Trying |
 Xin Fyrrae 2005-07-29 . chapter 1Interesting...it's short, I think you repeated a few words, and it could use a little more description, but then you did a good job with keeping Artha and Kitt IC. And, oh yes, quote everybody else...
Aww, so cute! Artha and Kitt are an item. ^^ |
 Sensational Sista 2005-06-11 . chapter 1simple but it was cute. maybe in the future for your stories, you could make them a little longer... maybe even chaptered! =D
Wow, this was the first Dragon Booster fic I have found on FFN. Thank You! I'm so happy!! |
 KittxArtha forever 2005-04-14 . chapter 1 that was short and cute!
nice job^^ |
 The Lightning Flash 2005-04-11 . chapter 1Yay! First Dragon Booster fic on ! We need a category.
Nice fic, a bit short, but it WAS a spur-of-the-moment thing, so not bad. :) |
 Blue-Inked Frost 2005-04-11 . chapter 1How'd this get on Misc. Anime?
Artha and Kitt are IC and this is spelt very well. I also like that you didn't give Kitt an overly-angsty situation. The prose style, however, is extremely simplistic--you need to add more description to make it more interesting. The style makes it sound like a kids' picture book rather than anything more advanced. Also, I get the impression you're trying to avoid the word "said". Believe me, it's more obvious and grating when you're deliberately not using it than when you use it excessively, and you're repeating "asked" and "answered" a bit too often.
Nice fic, though. :) We need a Dragon Booster category. |
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