Damn that's depressing. Really well written to. The imagery you create is pretty horrifying it's so well done. Especially the thoughts as the whip cracks.

It's depressing to think that things like actually happened in the world. Hell, they probably still do somewhere.

Anyway, brilliant imagary, and well written. I'm intentionally refraining from saying 'a good story' because it certainly didn't leave me feeling 'good', but of course, it's a very well done story. That's a bit of a confused point. It is a good story, but not a positive story. But that's obvious.

Either way, very well written, and very thought provoking, which I'm sure is what you were aiming for.

Damn... just damn. I'm not really sure what to say. The imagery was so vivid it hurt to read this. I think i need to lie down.

I remember reading this on the Alla forums. It's very deep, and you actually make it seem that these Gilsellers were made to be part of a short sub-quest storyline thingy. in sohrt, good job, and keep it up.