reading this fic makes me wanna protect hao. it's cute...and sad at the end, if hao dies. does he?

but i read in a german tutorial for fan fiction that stories should never end with "i love you". there are too many fics ending like this, so you should think of something else next time.

AW

that's so sweet! :'D (i so wish that actually happened/will happen x3)

I think that you captured everyone rather well _

But imo, I think that the last line was a bit OOC.

Well, not really but a bit blunt o-O'

Idk what can possibly replace that...

Maybe something more of an innuendo?

x.x

But I loved this story :'D

And? It is not going to continue? Died Hao?

Excellent fic!

Disgusting! A! Why? Oh why? Hao should like get a girl friend or something! But it's ur fic...good job

veniece

Well, it was okay. I didn't HATE it... but I didn't LUV it either. Some of the characters were OOC, and I thought the ending (while not bad) could've been better.

The end felt a little 'thrown toegther' to me. But I still liked it, all things considered. Not bad.

-Phoenix

T_T Oh God, that's sad! I love HaoXYoh!

*Sniffles*I loved that, keep up the awesome work!

*Bawls eyes out*

OMG! Poor Hao...Hao...DAMN! I can't think of a nickname for HAO! Anyways that was short n sweet! Good Job!

- xImperfectlyX

Aw. That was totaly awsome! almost made me cry. I loved it :D

M... not bad but it ended a *bit* too abrupt in my opinion )

awws...that was cute. i wanna hear what yoh had to say back to him T_T feel bad for hao though_

Is not bad for one shot :3 sort of Hao OCC but still cute :D

Nyago

So sweet and so sad, poor Hao if only the real series ended something like that. Good one-shot!

Wa! This is so sad! Why did Hao have to die? He could have just stopped the attack or fainted or something...

not to offend or anything but this would really be a good story for a non one shot. er cause the whole idea is really nice. _ I dunno I'll just wait and see. err if u don't make it a one shot err then I'll just keep on reviewing. This is such a good story.