Wow been a while lol. Ya I heard that you were making a fanbook hope that goes well. I like this chapter keep up the good work and I hope you update soon I really want to know what happens at the end.

beautiful story, full of detail, lovable original characters, overall professional story; and loved the use of the sound 4 prior to the stuff, lol. keep up the good work

Hey its me. Cool chapter. I heard you still haven't gotten any reivew lately anyways. Keep up the good work and update soon.

Wow good chapter can't wait till the next one.

Nice fanfic. Keep up the good work.

hey, good chapter. Flowing along well. Can't wait for the next one.

Well I see you finally updated lol. Anyways this was really good. Very intresting now I wonder how the next one is going to be like.

ooh, i liked it. :]
it was really good in my opinion, even thought some people say it was based off an episode[that i unfortunatley, of course, did not watch! haha].

Hey wow been a while. Oh ya this is BC ya I heard you got in trouble for the sn so I chanced it anyways. Ya this chapter is really good. Now I can't wait to read the next chapter. This sounds really good.

It doesn't matter if I know what's going to happen, that still doesn't stop the anticipation and excitement from building up. Nice job in condensing it, but still keeping the key points of the story. I'll be anxiously waiting for the next update.

Well I was waiting for you to update this chatper lol. Well what to say what to say lol. Well I say that it's really good and I can't wait to read the next chapter. Well I hope you update soon. I know that your busy with your test but I know after you'll feel way beter. Well see ya.

Its fine, but I think you could be more descriptive about the places they are,the things the do, the objecs they use (Example: Naruto was doing his own thing like he always does every single day. He walked the dust road to his favorie Ramen shop, as he walked into the wooden stablishment, ordered Miso Raman, as the cook prepared his order, a smile came across Naruto´s face, suddenly as he waited a young women, came into the shop, he turned back to see who just came in, she has her "jet black hair cut short with small looped earrings on both ears wearing a black sleeveless shirt with the green Chunnin vest wearing black pants with a couple of side pockets on both pant legs and a face mask like Kakashi-sensei’s wears but dark dark blue with a dark green glove’s the same as Kakashi- sensei’s with her head protector on her right arm.")
Try to give information that the reader would know like he/she was watching that scene, what he/sha can know and what he/she cannot know just by looking around,let the reader explore by it self whats happening (Like say young woman than that she has 18 years old, the spetator dont know that, and those who are familiar with Naruto should know that already) alo try to identify people with how the look than putting numbers cause its like if you were writing a script more than a story

Instead of Villager 2, the man frowned, scratched his mustache mustache “You did what you could don’t be so ** yourself.” said making Magumi feel more calm.

Thats all I can think of to make your writing better, always try make to the ones whom will read your stories to be exiting as it is to you writing it ;).

Peace Sam.

Wow been a while since the last one lol. Anyways it was a very good chapter can't wait what happens next. I mean this story is getting pretty intersting. Wonder how its going to and how any chatper your going to put.

Please update!!
luv,
shadow-5-girl

Yay! I finally got to watch the episodes this is based off! But what an experience, to watch the anime after reading a story about it. One thing I have to say, you do a fine job in turning a show into literature… and adding a little extra here and there.