Great fanfic, i have enjoyed it so far.

I agree with huparcho, this story has some serious potential, but without proper grammar it's almost impossible to read.

nice story, it is really good

I don't have time to read the rest of the chapters right now but from the first chapter I have to say I like it! Thanks for reviewing Collide, I will be reviling Marie a little bit but... (Insert Maniacle laughter here)

This story has potential, but it needs some serious rewriting.

1. Fix the grammar and punctuation. The way it is written now makes it difficult to read.

2. The original characters need to be overhauled. Remember that the power to digivolve comes from emotional bonds with the digimon. In addition the new character's would not have as much experience and are not as powerful as canon characters. Most importantly, do not overpower them.

3. Get rid of the character bashing. Davis is not an idiot. Yamaki is not evil. Both of them went through considerable character development during their respective series. If you must have someone arrest Ken, make it a nameless grunt. Remember that Yamaki is an executive and programmer. He is not a policeman and does not have the authority to arrest anyone.

4. Try to go more onto the character's emotions and motivations.

5. Give the diigmon personalities and a role in the story beyond battle machines.

good

I do like your story, how it's blending zero-two with Tamers, but there's not much mood in this story, and not much punctuation. The story is kind of confusing, but I'm not one to carp. I love how Henry had a HUGE crush on Kari! The show doesn't cover the origins of the card game in 03 much. Love your penname!