1. then reached for once of the roses on the nearby table
"once" -> "one"

2. Breaking off most of the thorny stem – no roses in the Black house were without thorns – and placed the bloom within the wild, spiraling fountain of raven hair.
"and placed" -> "he placed"

3. She saw, as though through Second Sight, that Bellatrix drew strength from her fiancé without destroying him, and in return, he seemed bolstered by her wild spirit, not overwhelmed by it.
"and in return," -> "and, in return,"

This is very thoughtfully and beautifully written. Three mistakes over this length, while avoidable, is not a critical error. Though typos can be very glaring and mood-stopping, none of yours detracted from the piece.

That was really nice--my favorite part was when Lucius was watching Narcissa and Bella illuminated in the sunset I just loved your imagery. I can just see a painting of them sitting there together in the sunset. I also loved how you worked with the themes of growing up and what makes a good marriage and everyones' various beliefs on love.

WOW...this is THE BEST Bellatrix story I've ever read. I can find absolutely NOTHING to criticize in your story. You did a REALLY good job.

Absolute perfection. Best story I've read in ages. Have you noticed all the other Bella/Rodolphus fics are about him being abusive and evil and badass? Ugh.

The story was beautiful. It's very hard to find any Bellatrix/Rodolphus stories, so it was a treat to find one as well written as this one with such great characterization. I especially liked the bits of the Lucius/Narcissa. Nice job. ^^

Oh, this is gorgeous. The different perspectives fit together perfectly, and what vivid, captivating images of the sisters! And Rodolphus and Lucius for that matter. Beautiful and sensual.

I very much enjoyed reading this fine piece. There are a few places where you have some redundancies. ‘seems to’ is one of them. There are a few passives I would say overall the use of those doesn’t bother me. I guess in the states it will however, here in the U.k it’s not as important. I do enjoy HP and feel you added a colour that’s original and shines through well.
Nice to see a fresh voice here on this site. One which knows how to grab a reader’s attention. Bravo!
Gail

Me likies ^_^. VERY good. I do love that Black family, would have liked to have seen Regulus more, though. Bella and Cissy missing Sirius was quite poignant--even though he 'betrayed' them, they still loved him...

wonderfull! your a amazing writer

That was wonderful. A Bellatrix/Rodolphus romance probably wasn't easy to write, especially since the A/N's says you didn't like Rodolphus. But that was very nicely done.

Wow. One of your best, and I rarely read HP fics, except for ones that truly interest me. *hats off to you*
The character descriptions and the contrast between the sisters is absolutely brilliant. What is this thing of the past that the girls remember? "Being in love with one’s wife is even worse than finding her interesting." Sums up the general opinion in the Slytherin House, but its very interesting how Rodolphus is doubting it, and you have the sense Bella is too, though she of course won't admit it.
Absolutely adore the sunset imagery; beautifully done, and the hair thing is greatly symbolic
Save the best for last:
"Bellatrix drew strength from her fiancé without destroying him, and in return, he seemed bolstered by her wild spirit, not overwhelmed by it. Had, Narcissa wondered, Bellatrix found herself engaged to a rare man, one who could be struck by her lightning and yet avoid incineration?" Great couple they are.