u should write a sequil if there isnt 1 already. i want 2 see what happens during the GT arc w/ the NWC added 2 the equation. so please if there isnt a sequil please write 1 if there is... well i better check out ur profile then.

was a cool story

I really like this story please continue to write.

Great story! I hope you right a sequel soon.

This story has turned into a rubber ball that's very quickly bouncing a long. I keep feeling each part could use some more attention. Perhaps you could go through them and lengthen them out.

It's not a bad start. I can see Akane thinking that Mr Satan would be a man that could teach her to be stronger. Of course while I think Akane would have reason to go to him, I think the reason you wrote out is a bit... cliche might be the right word for it. Why not have her go so Ranma wouldn't have to worry about her all the time?

But either way works. Just thought I'd drop you an idea. So far everything looks good. Take it easy.

i'm sorry, and i hope you excuse my language, but WTF??!!

it just seems so odd... haven't seen an nabiki/ranma pairing before... seems alien to me ::D

only seen akane and kasumi pairings before... this just kind of freaks me out because its new... and what about akane now?

Very nice but it feels unfullendet ... unfinished somehow and somehow so rushed. Akane is a lesbian. Akane is in love with Ranko. Why and how? How the heck is Ranko Ranmas sister. rushed. Ranma loves Nabiki. How and when did they fall in love. rushed. It is a if I am stating I am taking over the world and a few seconds later I have done that and no one know how I did it.
But i like it.

That was a good story, but if you ever decide to revisit this, could you at least develop the ending more? It's like you got 3/4 of the story done, and crammed the entire falling action into a single chapter. If you could, say, triple the length of the ending it would work. And yes, the Ranko/Akane thing was visible from a mile away, but you had them go from almost-strangers to lovers in a single chapter! WTF!?

Would it not be better for ranko not to be ranma's sister but his other half for the curse is made for the people you dont just fall into a random one but one that shows what you lack or represent most common to such as Ryoga. We know that most of his actions are that of a pig so rash in his actions also a perv but to further my statement why not let them be yin and yang?

Your friend and Master of Mystic Arts Fighting School
Toushin...

Ps... you can contact me at for beta reading or just to talk and maybe some ideas.

You have some very weird ideas...the story is good, but in un unfinished way. Basically: Oh yes! I'm sure Ranma looves Nabiki! And of course Akane is a lesbiane! I mean, it's so obviouse! Did I mention that Goku wants to take over the owrld and Vegeta is ranting about how Trunks is the perfect son?!?

Just wanted to leave a little review for the first chapter saying that I LOVE your writing and I hope you don't give up this fic. It's awesome! I'll leave another, longer, critique-like review when I finish all the chapters you have posted-which may take awhile. So keep writing, please. You're style really flows well.

I liked the story. It was EX-CELL-ENT! Laters!

i enjoyed this story very much keep it up

very nice