It was the best story ever! Keep up the good work!

Poor, Kagura, i hope she'll be okay.

I liked this story. It was very sweet... sweet and sad. You pulled at my heartstrings with this story. Kudos!

*Off to find a Kleenex*
--Princess Miyazawa

that was great you just got to continue!

This chapter had a lot of POV changes; some of the sections were really small which made it feel jumpy. On the other hand, more POV changes meant more spaces, which made it a little easier to read. Some of your sentences are a little confusing, too, either from missing puncuation or just awkward wording. You might want to do a read-over, especially on the dialogue.

I did like Kyou stepping up to protect Kagura and saying the big 3 words. It seems like she's getting closer and closer to accepting her love for him and that that might be the catalyst for her memories to come back. I'm going to stick with my original opinion about the Misty/Master subplot; I have to say that I think the story might be stronger without it. But again, that's just me and you're the writer and should go with what you feel serves the story best.

cant wait for the next chapter good job keep up the good work o.-

I READ IT ALL!PLEASE UPDATE!

I read it all, it's very well written. I like it ^__^ UPdate asap, please!

~Stephs~

My favorite ongoing theme in recent chapters is definitely Kyou dealing with his feelings and the change that Kagura has undergone at the same time. Just when he wants her to do all the things that used to annoy him, she goes and gets the memories of why she wanted to do them erased. Poor Kyou, lol.

I loved the insights of Kyou as he tried to comfort Kagura. Him holding her and thinking about how he shouldn't but wanted to when before he could've but didn't want was great. I also liked how you have Kagura's confusion at not being able to remember some important things bothering her. If huge pieces of my past seemed to be missing, I'd be upset, too. Lovely chapter.

Oh, and because I forgot to mention it in my review of "ZL", you labeled the chapter as number 13 when it was 12.

its very good, but there are some mistakes... little ones, like spelling and grammar here and threre, but also some confusing parts:

considered popular enough to really consider talking to Misty. She had her red hair up into two buns and her brown eyes seemed to really bore into Kagura… what was wrong?

d as she turned slightly, how come she never ran past anyone and someone just spoke her name? It

Kagura turned to Shigure and asked him himself.

yeah.. i think thats abt it.. .well, there mite b more.. sry im being so critical .. heh.. :D

it IS very good!! :D

Maybe I'm just tired but this chapter was a bit confusing. I think you should try double spacing after every paragraph to help make it easier to read. Since there aren't any indents, it's easy to lose your place or confuse who's speaking. But that's just the technical stuff.

Poor Kagura's just getting it heaped on her, isn't she? First her family and roamce troubles and now she has an enemy because she's the boar. The poor girl just can't catch a break! Kyou better stay by her side and help her through it.

hm.. this chapter was slightly confusing... but good.. so misty's erm... evil? hm... i still dunt understand the "group", tho. is Misty part of it? if the paragraphs had less dialogue and were shorter, i think it would be easier to understand.. and the shapter was kinda short :( but the story's still very good! :D

Poor Kagura keeps losing out in one way or another. First she has good friends but nothing with Kyou; now she has Kyou but has (temporarily, I hope) lost her friends. Nice chapter.

When is chapter 12 coming? I can't stand the suspense! Just as an idea maybe Elyon and Lacey can start looking at Kagura differently plus Kyou can invite Kagura or something and tell her about himself just a thought