LOL! He's never what you think he is.

Interesting...some very nice observations, here, on the team's interactions and Hannibal's thoughts (and the image of the wilting salad was a good one!) Please consider using a beta-reader, though, to catch some of your grammar mistakes like changing verb tenses and misspellings. It could help turn a "pretty good" story like this one into something really special.

good piece Hann. keep writing. i liked the part where hannibal thought face was in true deep thought about the kids, when all he wa checking out was the beautiful woman. very good, and interwoven. write more please. :)

Hello, Hannerdock. This is probably the most interesting piece of yours that I have read. I really like this. I think you should fine tune it. For example: "Ya wanna join in, Mr?"...This might read better as, "Ya wanna join in, Mister?" I believe it will help the reader. What do you think?...I think that you really have the flavor of something here...Please keep writing. I look foward to your next endeavor.