Now, I've read both, and "No Smoking" was elegant- you used only the words you needed to in order to convey the scene, and each piece was laid out like a puzzle, all fitting carefully together. And you've done similarly here. But I have to confess- I like this one better. Because while Spot and Race being covert in public is perfect- it's the Spot and Race being honest to each other where no one else can see that keeps drawing me back.

I have...no words. (extremely rare for me)

but i must make note:
"...and doesn’t seem to matter who leaned in first."
...THAT ^ was a nice touch.

oh, and i also must say, i immensely enjoyed the way you portray spot and race's physical appearances so HONESTLY. it's hard to describe them in words that would...convey their attractiveness-that's-not-really-THAT-hot and still do their looks justice, you know? cuz they ARE two pretty good-lookin boys, just not in the typically expected way.

by the way, i forgot to add this in "No Smoking" review:
"Spot’s eyes flicker towards him but Jack doesn’t cower and it’s suddenly clear that Spot doesn’t intimidate everyone."
that line just kinda totally killed spot's iron demeanor for me. i mean, i agree in that jack shouldn't necessarily COWER, but maybe you could add "all the time" to the end there. just, you know, to keep up spot's tough guy image. it's part of his irresistable appeal (at least, for me).

This is so smart & well written. I feel compelled to confess that I am a girl, but I swear the slash fics are always better! Besides, what more could a girl ask then Spot & Race? They definitely make the cutest couple. NEways, this story is awesomely witty, honest & intelligent, but still very sexy! Good job!

So many terrific lines in this. *happy sigh* Beautiful job.

Oh. I like it. I do just love SpRace. I really really do.