Aw. I actually wasn't going to read this, but hey. It's YOU. So i read it.

Good job, my friend. ^_^

...hell, I could probably just IM you about this, but reviews are so much fun :P hahaha.

::cries:: this was a very good fic
write more soon, right?

Aw, so cute and geeky. I love your David, he's excellent. Only CC is that the last part could've been longer - it seemed a little too abrupt.

However, you made physics seem exciting, and that alone would get you major points with me. The cuteness of David just adds to it.

Dude wow awesome story. The end though... did they HAVE to break up? Because yeah, break ups suck. The end also reminded me of Bare kinda--with Jack as Jason (hey two J's hehehe) and Davey as Peter. But still, really really good story. I especially loved the symbolism in the last line.

Arg, I'm logged in under the wrong of penname--but anyway, this is B, and I really really like this. i like the way it's segmented and the different science themes of each segment; that's a really clever way telling the story. The buid up to the relationship is great, and the tension between Jack and David, and David's love of science, are all also juts... wonderful.

Two tiny bits of CC: one, I wasn't clear on whether on not David was out; he didn't seem to be because Jack didn't know, but then it seems like at the end, Jack is referencing other people knowing; and two, the end of the relationship and Jack breaking it off feels a little... abrupt. Mostly Jack's last big paragraph,a bout his dad... It just seems like if they hadn't talked about his family at all before, it would be a bit abrupt for him to burst out with it all of a sudden when the readers haven't seen anything to imply Jack's got a problem yet.

However, aside from those two notes, I think this is really brilliant and beautiful. It's got a very good Javid-y tone to it, and again, I really love your framing device in it. This is just lovely.

AW! He DUMPED him! It was so cute, and then he DUMPED him! Curses!

Ohmahgawh, you. You... gr. That's how amazingly awesome you are. I can't even be coherent, you're so awesome. Oh my goodness, sir, you are so awesome. I can't even describe. It's so beautiful, CB. Ohmahgawh. Just... ught, so good.

kP

Oh my! I have to say that that was one of the best fictions I have ever read! I was rivited the entire time! And I have a shorter attention that even Jack. Probably.
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Things I loved:
1. Your use of different Laws/Principles/Rules of science
2. The portrayal of struggle within a boy grappling at his sexuality (Jack, of course)
3. The fact that David is a nerd (me too, but a full-on English/Geography/History one)
4. The use of French
5. The pure humanity of it. I loved 'The Big Bang' because you used common parental reminicing, which I'm sure everyone's mom does.
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Oh Lordy! This was fantastic!
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Cheers,
Buttons

Another most excellent story. Ive never been a big Davey fan, but this story changed my opinion of him. Oh, heh, I got Blood Drips last week. You were right, its awesome. So, yay for you!

wow. that was truly amazing. Normally, I don't really like Javid stuff, but this one i actually liked. the way you included all the science stuff was great, it made the story flow.
Great job! :)
-Braids

oh i loved this. jack with the attention span of a golden retriver! so true! this was really beatifully written (i can never spell beautifully), and you did a great job capturing david. plus, i never knew the appilcation of scientific facts could make a story more powerful. touche!