That was very good. You managed to stay in character as well as use very good imagery. In all honesty, this is one of the best Rocketshippy fics I've read in a while.

One thing though: You once switched from calling Nyarth to Nyasu, but I'm sure it was just a simple mistake.

So, huzzah for the angsty fluff!

This fic was brilliant. It is one of the best short rocketshippy pieces I have read in a very long time – and believe me, I have read a lot in that long time. You captured the feelings, emotions, actions and characters so well, I must really commend you, especially seeing as this is your very first Pokémon fic. I really hope that you continue writing Pokémon fics (preferably ones that involve Jessie/James romance!)… it would be a real shame for the rocketshipping world to miss out on more of your great work!
Keep the excellent work up!

~BansheeGirl.