Reviews for The Darkness Within

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lyricly odd 2008-04-22 ch 16,	abusemy god this was amaizing i cant put into words how much i loved reading every word of this story whey herm died god i almost cried i was shaking and instantly had to have a cigarete
azrael502 2008-03-08 ch 16, anon.	abusevery well written a very good story
Neqa'elis 2008-01-26 ch 16,	abuseA review! Lol. Well, I found your story pretty interesting. You had some problems with dialogue where I wasn't quiet sure what had happened like when Harry reveals his identity to Lucius. It was too vague. I also didn't understand why Harry decided to change sides at the last minute when Hermione was AKed. I understand that Hermione ran in front of Voldemort because of the fake prophesy. However, HARRY told that lie to her. Why would he suddenly snap and kill Voldemort? It's illogical. It wasn't Voldy's fault; it hardy had anything to do with him. This just says to me that Harry is fickle in his alliances to other people. Have him snap and crucio Moody, and go from there; it would have fit better in my opinion. And why did Harry change sides again in the epilogue after nine years of being Light? Ask yourself questions when you're writing. Is this reasonable? Would this really happen? It'll help you avoid plot holes and inconsistencies in your story. Now things I liked about your fic: I liked your dialogue and I thought it fit the characters and how you portrayed them. The phrasing was good, but again, you needed to add more details to flesh your story out, such as describing the atmosphere in the room ect... I enjoyed your idea on why Harry would decide to learn the Dark Arts. It was a very reasonable and logical explanation. I liked Hermione in this fic too. She added to Harry's development, and plus, she's one of my favorite characters. ;) Draco was also well portrayed, though he kind of dropped off the planet in the end there. Any way, it was overall an enjoyable read. It was an interesting fic and congates on finishing it. xD P.S: I'm putting this in my C2.
unknown 2007-11-08 ch 1, anon.	abuseIT SHINES? Really? YOU Sure? Nah dosen't matter but hey I reviewed and great job with the story!!
dre 2007-10-28 ch 16, anon.	abuseI guessed the ending from the summary itslef, but still, it is a pretty good fic.
F.orbidden-L.ight 2007-10-22 ch 16,	abuseMonths? years? Same difference. Great story, different take on the 'Harry goes bad' theme, needless to say I liked it, your style of writing is very original and I enjoyed it a lot. Thanks for writing it.
Short-Stuff Serpent 2007-09-17 ch 16,	abuseAmazing. Going straight to my faveriots. I usually hate hermionie as well.
Angel of the Godless 2007-07-19 ch 16,	abuseThis story was the most beautiful dark story I have ever read; the ending was so bitter and sad that I had to stop reading because I was crying so hard. It was twisted and cruel how it ended with Hermoine's death, but it made the story all the more powerful. You have done marvelous work, and I hope that you will write more. Goodbye
sayena 2007-07-02 ch 16,	abuseGood story!! Keep writing.
JVSO 2007-05-29 ch 16, anon.	abuseReview-whoring before you've finished the story is unattractive. If your sole reason for writing is to be acknowledged, all well and good, once it is done. But if you only write when you are acknowledged, then you're probably not that interested. That said, good work. It's a fine story, with even some slightly original ideas, a rarity now that so many stories have been written. Je veux seulment oublier.
nathanallen9 2007-05-17 ch 16, anon.	abusei just finished this story and find it briliant i have so many question to ask about it and was hoping you could email me my email adress is some of the questions are like at the end is that harry and is he rising as the nexed dark lord and do you have any plans for a sequel i do hope you write one because you are a briliant writer and i must say i enjoyed reading the darkness within even more than the other hp books bye jk rowling i hope you email me thank you
verath 2007-04-21 ch 16,	abuseWow great job...that was an amazing story.
NO 2007-04-17 ch 16, anon.	abuseOMG...are you nuts?!?!?!?!?!?! this fic is awesome...not to mention sad as well in the second last chapter... :(
Wheeee!! 2007-04-17 ch 1, anon.	abuseNice story coming up so far, I'm liking it.
arsilverangel 2007-04-11 ch 1,	abuseAh fellytone... I'm so amazed you remembered that.. I was just re-reading book 3 today, got to the end... and that's where Ron said it. Amazing... XD

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