i've only just found this story and i realise that you've finished it now, but i think it's great and i believe that good work should be complimented. your writing is great and i really like the 'full circle, lucy/carter' thing, i'm just sad that you stopped writing it! x

MORE! i wanna know what happens! lol o u better not kill off sam! no no no no no no! =D

wow-
interesting concept -
a LOT of effort needs to go into your grammar, tense, sentence structure and spelling.

flashbacks are fine, but one shouldn't have to read a peice over and over to figure out what the heck is going on.

keep trying

how tragic! i suppose you're not planning on killing off this couple seeing. i like the way you actually use the INT and EXT headings. it makes it seem more professional. and i'm glad you decided to post up on rather than in a thread. overall - souper! nice one

Thank you *so* much for all your reviews guys! I will update soon!

Laura, krazypirategurl,samkaalexfan, thank you! ;)

krazypirategurl,samkaalexfan-You're gonna have to wait and see! Sam is my faourite character too, Luka comes close second, very very close...

And yes I got the idea from when Carter and Lucy got stabbed, and plus hence everything being 'Full Circle' ;)

KEEP GOING, i want to know if she dies... but its so sad that the baby died.

So cute... so, so cute :)

Laura xx

please iupdate. i don't want sam to die. shes my fave person on ER. did u get this idea from the episode when lucy and carter got stabbed.

Ok to solve this problem, I will re-read through the un-published chapters and have a beta reader look through them, to make sure the sentence structure is working, the dialogue is believable and that there are no grammatical errors.
Also once I have finished publishing in Flashback for the readers who appreciate it, I will then publish it in a normal story mode. So hopefully it will read better and you will be able to appreciate the story. I will do this by adding the normal story onto the end of the flashback as new chapters so I don’t confuse people by publishing a new story etc.
I cannot see how my writing is ‘sloppy’ but that’s your opinion, I do not necessarily agree with it and I hope you can re-think as I think that it could never be described as ‘sloppy’, I took a lot of time with this and I feel the writing is not simply ‘sloppy’.
It is after all flashback, it may be different and fancy but that is the way I chose it to be.
Please consider my views and I really hope you can enjoy the story.

aww the bay ided. plese continuei will be happy as long as sam lives.

A beta reader is an editor. Someone who works with you on your fic to make sure the plot works and the story is readable. And this fic can definitely use one. "Flashback" mode aside, the writing itself is very sloppy and hard to follow.

I can understand the desire to try to make your fic a bit 'different'. But if a reader has to read everything multiple times to understand what's going on, then you're doing something wrong. Before trying to do things 'fancy' it's important that you learn how to write basic prose. Stuff like grammar, sentence structure, realistic dialogue. There's plenty of time for the fancy stuff after you've mastered the basics.

For what it's worth, I've been writing professionally for over a decade -- and I have a beta reader for my fics here. They can be very valuable.

Well that's what the plot is supposed to be like. The Flashback episode in Season 9 was damned hard to understand but all the while good. I liked that style and thought i'd try it out.
Yeah, i have to work on the tenses.
What do you mean, a 'beta reader'?!!

Flashback Mode is gonna be hard to grasp, but read it a few times and you'll understand the plot just fine.

I THINK there's a plot somewhere in here, and it might even be interesting. But the writing has me so lost that I'm not sure. The constant flashbacks, the garbled grammar, your tendency to use 'they' and 'their' when you mean 'she' and 'her' ... the constant flipping between past and present tense ... the incomprehensible medicine ... it's almost impossible to follow what's going on. Oh, and Dr. Coburn is a woman.

A good beta reader would help this immensely.

Samkaalexfan. Remember it's set in flashback mode! So when it flashed at the end of Chapter Three, to follow on from that go back to the last flash and read again. ;)

More is on the way! So glad you like it!

is that mean shes died... thas sad he loses two loved ones in one day.. he has so many loved ones lost

geez

keep going its good!

Katie