The story was a good idea and moved quickly. The characters behaved as they should and there were a few giggle worthy lines. However it read a little jerky. Dialogue far outweighed action. The action we were given seemed over simplified. I'm not sure if this should have been taken as a script format or prose format. If it's script it needs to be cleaned up to read as such. If it's prose it needs to be fleshed out some. Author has a lot of potential.

Cade delivered a baby? You gotta be joking me!

This was such a good story. You captured the characters very well indeed. I could picture everything in perfect detail. I say write more! As a fellow writer I insist it. Go for it!

Aw I love stories about babies. Keep posting, Irish.

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