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Blackdragonpi 2008-10-07 ch 10,	abuseShouldn't the Sliver Queen be a 9/9 at least.
Blackdragonpi 2008-10-02 ch 51,	abuseLike none of us could SEE that coming 20 chapters ago. I love this story but darn, that was predictable back when you introduced Chihowaido.
Blackdragonpi 2008-10-02 ch 28,	abuseJedi mind trick. Use the force...Arrathir
Blackdragonpi 2008-10-01 ch 2,	abuseArtifacts have no colour. Artifact is a card type.
Blackdragonpi 2008-10-01 ch 1,	abuseOne turn kill decks really difficult to build since most cards that let you do that are either banned or restricted. Loved your last story.
tipster 2008-08-21 ch 8, anon.	abusei can sense the kiba-ness in erik, lol
Dennis N. Santana 2007-11-03 ch 1,	abuseI'm reading this without having read the latest one, so a lot of this stuff, you might have already known and rectified. Nevertheless, considering this while you read this review. The style is really very minimalistic. I feel like I didn't get to know the characters really well except for minutae like what kind of decks they play or what person they're in love with. The kind of factoids you read about celebrities. They had distinct personalities but when I thought about them, I thought of their personality archetype, rather than really about them (of course my mind assigns types that might not fit with your perception of your own characters, so I state none of the following as fact). Arrathir was "brooding anti-hero" to me; Eva was just the angry tsundere; Charles was the smart helpful guy; Erik was a selfish bastard. Etc. I think you got caught up in writing duels and the characters were just devices for playing these duels out. That appeals to a big audience – after all MTG is all about the cards – so I don't really fault you for the choice. The actual plays in the duels are pretty interesting. However the minimalistic description makes them go by very quickly and not be extremely eye-catching. I could scroll past them just looking at card names and life counts, and have a general idea anyway of what was going on. Rather I would have liked to see the effects being played out. I mean, Wrath of God is a nuke cloud going off. That should be more spectacular than just "creatures being wiped off the field". You can see your style evolve over the course of the story, so my guess is, as I am about to start on Twilight, that a lot of these problems you have grown past. In fact I see you already growing past them in your later chapters. I have no better advice to give because I know full well I'm not the kind of reader this story targets. I'm a little jaded against very anime-ish sort of action stories. Dialogue and situations here sometimes came off as unintentionally amusing to me rather than "dark" like they were supposed to be. This is like a shonen anime. That is, it has a specific audience and I'm not it, and I don't think it will help you to write towards me if your audience has already been selected, and looking at your reviews, is pleased with your work. Sorry for the tl;dr essay. I hope it was helpful even a little bit, and that it does not irk you, or your readership.
Electric Eclectic 2007-06-01 ch 56,	abuse(Claps) Very powerful story. It took me 2 days to read it but I enjoyed every minute of it. I have to ask you a few questions though. 1. Do you like Fire Emblem? 2. WHat kind of MTG Deck do you use? 3. Have you gotten any of the new stuff from Future Sight?
Esquire 2007-04-04 ch 11, anon.	abuseWhat the hell took the sliver deck so long . . . she should've focused attacks on one and eliminated one at a time . . . . also, she got the Queen AND the Overlord BOTH out and a pack of rare and tricksy slivers and she STILL LOST ? ? ? god-damn . . . she needs a swift kick where it hurts . . . .
Who's Asking 2007-01-22 ch 12,	abusei think i heard you mention that slivers are cheap, because a few key slivers can win you the game easily? so, in your opinion, would it be cheap for me to use a deck that makes my creatures into slivers, to use their power against them?
Faceplant02 2007-01-03 ch 56,	abuseThanks for the story man. I admit I'm kind of a sucker for happy endings...er happy transistions. Anyway I'm biased because all the lead characters are still alive (to a certain extent with Erik). But in all seriousness, your writing has definitely improved since YGO vs. MTG. That and you're more knowledgeable now with the Magic rules so I don't have nearly as many nitpicky complaints about the duels as the previous story (Obviously there are things here and there that could use some improvement, but you're only human.) Now onto part three.
Reinard Toma 2006-06-29 ch 38,	abuseHello I'm using my brother's account because I don't have one yet but anyways I agree about the mary-sue thing and wish to join the ATOMS my e-mail and great fan fic it is asome I glomp you and your skill.
Reinard Toma 2006-06-26 ch 56,	abuseWow this one was even better then the MTG vs. ygh you and cannon are great writers^-^ going into writing as a career is a good idea. i also hope you will continue with Arrathir and his adventures. I know a lot of people who would try to write this story and finish it in 20 chapters and call it good it would have sucked. So good job on this wonderfull fic.^-^ Thank you alot. And we all saw Eva as the keeper of the red mana:P great fic later
Megamickel 2006-04-13 ch 56,	abuseWow. Another story concluded. You had a good run with this one! I really enjoyed reading it. Even though waiting for the next chapter kind of drives you nuts. I just say, you could be a damn good author if you put your mind to it. And let Cannon be your editor XD Well, whatever. You got something good here.
ColossusCrusher 2006-04-10 ch 56,	abusewow. just wow. please hurry your break up. i cant wait for the sequel... KEEP ON WRITING! really, go to wizards of the coast and see if you can publish...i would buy it like that...and ican speak for everyone when i say that everyone else at AoM would too...

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