OMG i love Cavallo, Meravi and Fuoco(hope i spelleed it right).. wouldnt mind a little MeravixHarry, teehee

I loved that MeravixHArry part!

I adore that Ron is in this story too!! Keep that! :D

oh god.. im going to die,, this is so great!

Just after Draco came through the barrier and they were talking to Fuoco my media player switched song to "can't touch this", and I couldn't stop laughing...

"he next day after classes had finished, Harry went back up to the Gryffindor tower. Harry had his own room now. Dumbledore had given it to him for defeating Voldemort."

That's from chapter 4, but you have room berating them for doing the naughty in their dorm room, and I believe in the chapter before this you have the scene with filch where harry rund to the dorm room and shoved Draco under his bed and conversation in sues...I think you may need to do a few revisions to the story...just thought you ought to know...Love it so far tho!

Good story. The pace4 is quicker than I would have liked, but it's ok, really. More of a pain is how you put the response of the second person in the conversation after the first person talks. You should keep the response (verbal and non-verbal) of each person in one paragraph.

AH DRACO YOU'RE SO GAY.
Cutting? REALLY? Now you really are pathetic.

Yeah so...I did like the concept of this story. And I absolutely love Harry/Draco fics. They're my favorite. However I couldn't grow to like Harry at all in this story. Even at the end. He treated Draco horribly. I'm not really sure why it was necessary for all the Draco bashing that was in the story. I do like a bit of jealousy/angst stories as well, but this was somewhat ridiculous. It seemed that every time they would get in a fight it would somehow end up being Draco's fault, when nearly EVERY TIME it was initiated by Harry. FOr example...why would harry kiss seamus like that? I don't really care if it was a dare or not. How could he not know how much it would hurt Draco? That was completely inconsiderate of him. Granted Draco's reaction was a little extreme, but HE IS A VEELA. And after all the help he gave Harry to find out his heritage and what to expect by being a creature, there was absolutely zero effort on Harry's part to understand Draco's veela heritage and what it would mean to their relationships (behavior,jealousy,possesiveness,etc.) Also I found it very troubling how Harry never seemed to defend Draco in regards to his friends. He never once told Ron to back off Draco when he was constantly insulting him. And I for one would not hide or deminish my affections toward someone I loved as much as Harry claimed he loved Draco, whether or not my best friend wanted it. If Ron was truly a friend he would understand. Harry was understanding of his and Hermione's relationship so he should show the same consideration. And I really don't even want to start on Marvelo, or whatever his name is. Granted he initiated the kiss with Harry, but it didn't seem like Harry minded too much. And I thought it trivialized the bond alot for him to make love to Draco RIGHT AFTER that kiss happened. Even before he had sorted his feeling out for his leader. I couldn't help hoping that at some point in the story SOMEONE would come out and show Draco TRUE LOVE and committment. To me, Draco always came in last in Harry's life. It was always either what his friends wanted or what Marvo(whatever his name is) wanted first. Draco needs someone who loves him without reservations or isn't concerned about what EVERYONE else thinks about their relationship. And especially someone who doesn't second guess thier feelings, or would even consider lusting after someone who wasn't their mate. Harry doesn't deserve a drop of Draco's affection.

great ending!

except...

WTF is with the ending line?! do i smell a sequel, perhaps? PLEASEPLEASEPLEASE! what a clifie...

i really must say that this is among the best creature!Harry and veela!Draco fics i have EVER read. the creatures are original and well developed, the relationship has actual issues, and there is no unneccessary slash scenes. i'm not a big prude or anything, but all of those scenes do get old after a while.

excellent writing! can't wait to read more of your work.

gah
you did write a sequel yeah? please say you did.
i really liked this fic
xx

“WHAT DID YOU DO?” Seamus yelled. “I left you alone with it for two minutes!”




just one thing; ah hahahahhbhbhabhfvhdfhbdfbg bg ghgjdngb.
yes, I lol'd.

wow i realy like this story there will be more drama acoming right ^_^

I think the next chapter might concern of loyalties and the power of love...will,draco strong to handle the challenge...actually is there a part that draco will suck into darkness and in despair?blame himself that took his soul...what will harry do??pls update ^_^

Okay... story is starting to cause mild Lulz (as in, I am finding humor where not humor but seriousness was intended), but still good so far. The Incandeche thing is reminded me of an MMORPG or something, especially the bulleted list of "Incandeche special powers".