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| Jinace 2006-08-11 ch 10, | abuseWow... I´m really impressed. Your characters are just awesome and the story is so damn well wirtten... Continue it! |
| Nicole 2006-04-04 ch 10, anon. | abuseWell it says continue...Continue it |
| Lecter 2005-10-05 ch 10, | abuseah pointful filler... nothing like it for a good laugh eh darling... but oh... creepy... what is Lazzarus planning... tell me... I MUST KNOW! ARGH! |
| Arina Hyuuga 2005-10-02 ch 10, | abuseI really liked it. Keep up the good work. I anxiously await the next chapter. |
| CordsCool 2005-08-30 ch 9, | abuseLol! I thought this was a good chapter - funny but also with a killer cliffhanger ending! Yay VAryssa is back and her writing is better than ever! Cordy is also back and bitching from her acute identity crisis! Just to clarify, HArry Potter is the best book ever - Voldemort is NOT Jesus and Xians Suck definately wears thongs! Keep up the good writing V! Can't wait till college starts - we are gonna have so much fun! |
| Lecter 2005-08-24 ch 9, | abuseI liked that chapter... it made me laugh. I do have one comment though: it was too short, and seemed rather pointless, I would have enjoyed a bit of action... filler sucks... but is sometimes necessary. |
| Ghosthic Satane 2005-08-22 ch 9, | abuseI don't know what the hour when the two go shopping for clothes but in Swansea most of the shop (and not only clothes shop) close at 5PM. Very few at 6PM or even 7PM. |
| Xians Suck 2005-08-16 ch 8, anon. | abuseI WEAR THONGS! |
| Piers549 2005-07-18 ch 8, | abuseARGH! PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ WRITE MORE! I CAN"T STAND THE SUSPENSE! o & 2 all u christian freaks who read this, knowing what it was about SHAME ON U!(I'm christian 2 but freedom of speech & i really don't care, im enjoying this) Varyssa I love this, don't worry about wut the nutcases have 2 say about it, listen 2 those who enjoy it & remember the whole freedom of speech thingie, I believe u 2 b an extremely talented writer, keep up the good work! |
| Dude on the Street 2005-07-15 ch 8, anon. | abuseokay, so i'm tapping my finger, and there's still no update. whatsup, varyssa? frank peretti's okay. better then shaunti feldhahn, that's for shore. hey autumnsbeginnig, lemme point somethin out: first you say "one-of-a-kind," then you say Varyssa has the same style as some other writer. just thought that was funny. well, whatever, Varyssa totally fits my style. don't like old-fashioned writing. anyway, i'm sick and tired of reading ch 8 over and over again. post finally, dammit! |
| autumnsbeginning 2005-07-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseDefinitely one-of-a-kind. You and Mrs. A. Hamilton have the same style, I've noticed. Like I told her, your writing is cool. Sort of a twist between This Present Darkness (and its sequel by Frank E. Peretti) and something like The Phantom of the Opera. Nice. God Bless Sarah |
| CordsCool 2005-07-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseXians Suck - I hate you you've caused me to become a hyprorite by arguing without reviewing! Yes - you're tiny paranoid mind is right - I'm an imposter and by impersonating u I will bring the whole world of fan to it's knees mha ha ha! Sorry got a Voldemortesque there - well HBP is out tomorrow! |
| Xians Suck 2005-07-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseCordsCool has gone schizo. You know, I have a hunch. Call me crazy, but I think this is all the same person impersonating Kikoken, me, and now CordsCool. |
| CordsCool 2005-07-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis story feels like it is nowhere. You hvaen't engaged with the characters and you keep on talking of a major plotpoint but where is it? Stories are nothing wihtout characters and Raphael doesn't make sense, Lucifer is intriguing butthere is a reason why he is the ultimate evil - embrace his darker side. |
| Mrs. A. Hamilton 2005-07-12 ch 8, | abuseOh! I'm excited! How thrilling! The Linkin Park song is very fitting, at least, from Lazzarus' point of view. You've improved since I last posted, so, great job! I can't wait for the next chapter! Struggle for power amongst the ranks of evil...how I love it! |