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Reviews For: Walking a Thin Line - Reviews: Page 1 of 10

L.A. Riverburn
2008-06-15
ch 10,
abuseYou know, you're really slacking there.
I mean, we didn't even get an author's rant. Worse, you didnt ask for reviews, and to make things absolutely inredeemable, you, left, out, the, disclaimer. I wouldn't worry about wether the cops saw your plate or not, you've got one hell of a lawsuit.

At least you've commented on Sara's constructive and elaborate review, telling her were you agree and were not, and how she helped you move on, the past is the past (I mean, it has been a year), and continue with what you got.

Someone once said "better 10 kodachi's loose then one cooking for you", and also said (I don't know if this is the same person) "Better copy right, than write badly"
so without further ado: Update! pwetty please.
I wrote Update with a capital but I think I can be forgiven. I also cannot help but feel a little girly, but if it gets you to update, I might even go as far as type "britney" in google (without pressing obviously, I'd erase it and type something more manly (like Gilmore Girls)).

this review also is not constructive, so let me add some constructive stuff:
One: at first I thought that you were the 3382th author that had Ranma go like "I'm actually someone totally different, I play violin, I detest violence and I drink coffee, black - but was wearing a mask because I was afraid someone would break my tuba". then I had to make the conclusion I was right, you did exactly that, safe for the tuba. However, I also noted that you write incredibly well, and that the new Ranma looks stunningly much like the old one, safe that he likes Nabiki a fair deal. since the whole story was lighthearted, very funny anyway, I continued reading it.
two: another first thought (wow, so much thought processing) was that you were the 3381th that loves Akane abuse. well, you weren't that bad...
three: Your chapters are awfully short, it's frustrating. I always have to press "next".
four: almost a year ago, you updated this thing...
ecchansama
2008-06-01
ch 10,
abuseOh HELL no, you aren't leaving this story in it's current state. I'll tie you down and force you to watch Teletubbies until your eyes crumbled to dust before allowing that to happen.
So, pretty please, write a few more chapters, for all our sakes?

I won't claim this is the best story I've ever read, that would be lying, but it's a different take on things, a way to breath some life into the Ranma fanfictions. I must admit though, the ending of this chapter confused me.

Anyway, keep writing, please?
/ecchansama
James Rennfield
2007-10-10
ch 10,
abuseVery nice story, though I could do with a longer chapter in the next update. But I like reading a lot. So much in fact I feared at one point I'd go cross-eyed, thankfully I didn't though.

Keep up the great work... no I mean it... I really do... I'm not just trying to be nice.
James Rennfield
2007-10-10
ch 2,
abuseGood story so far, feels a little rushed in places but I'll attribute that to the oocness of Ranma and his finally wanting to be rid of the fiance's.

I do like the premise of the story very much, and as your reward here's a donut, yep, chocolate covered with sprinkles and a creme filling. Only the best donut EVAH! Keep up the good work.
FalseExact
2007-09-18
ch 9,
abuselove the story, everything is really coming together and gives the feeling of a big bang somewhere along the line or possibilities to say screw the Ranma cast(except Ranma) and take it to a crossover or just a new setting all together.
FalseExact
2007-09-10
ch 10,
abusereally good story, enjoy reading it
Lerris
2007-08-26
ch 10,
abuseOverall, you could use more detail. Good story so far though.
sowhatimlate
2007-08-20
ch 9,
abuseYou're crazy,but I like this story. You're the 1st person I've seen in a while that uses 1st person to tell the story.
ss4-link
2007-07-18
ch 10,
abuseDamn it, your alive. **, now I can't steal your story. *pout*
Wonderbee31
2007-07-16
ch 10,
abuseHmm, looks like Ranma is getting more bitter here, and if this keeps up, then things are going to go downhill quickly.
dennisud
2007-07-15
ch 10,
abuseFinally caught up with this little ditty and I do like the plotline so far.
I do hope there is more than what ends on chapter 10 and given Nabiki's involvement it will come to pass that Ramna will have a place to stay and I have the sneaky feeling that one Nodoka Saotome will be involved.

Plus isn't her house close to Tokyo-U where nab's wants to go for university?

dennisud
Nysk
2007-07-15
ch 10,
abuseGood chapter, good story... May Sara get you with more pleases !
VeryConfused
2007-07-15
ch 10,
abuseStory freaking rocks. Don't stop writing good sir, please!
sara
2007-07-13
ch 9, anon.
abuseupdate! pwetty please
Vocarin
2006-12-27
ch 9,
abuseI noticed you haven't updated this for a while. I really hope you do, as I think you've got a real gem here. The plotline's pretty unique, and the development comes together very well. I enjoy reading this story, and hope you update it soon.
Vocarin
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