Cute and Sweet!

Aw soo awsome!

cute. i like how it compares to star wars. and it is good that you have it in this section, because it's not really about the characters from star wars, it's about d'artagnan and jacqueline. i like it. maybe you could continue with this fic, or one realatively like it where the two of them are together sectretly and they are trying to keep their secret from the others.

i liked most of this chapter, but i think the end of the chapter may have been better if you had some whitty dialouge between d'artagnan and Jacqueline.

great second chapter i can't wait to read the rest. i really like how your tying it together.

This looks like it's going to be quite interesting. i'm a little bit confused though as to how they got there. but at least this time it's not in reference to an episod i have not seen.

It's a good start, it has good potential. NExt time, don't center the words, it's harder to read that way.