Outstanding work, Miss Lovelace. Excellent.

So close...I guess I should have seen this coming. Aleph's seething frustration and Smith's calmness go hand in hand and comes off beautifully in this chapter. One can feel the underlying pathos.

Do keep the updates coming in.

Hey!! Sorry I haven't reviewed lately. I've been keeping up with the story but I took the summer off so I've been taking a lot of trips and stuff. But these last three chapters have been great. I loved the dialogue between Aleph and Persephone in the last chapter. Those two women have a lot of chemistry when you write them.

As to Smith and Aleph, their chemistry, too, is still going strong. The unresolved sexual tension between them is palpable. Smith is acting especially interesting here. Not only is he now stubbornly refusing to see their way out (is this a bit a fear on his behalf or just hopelessness? Either way, it's just as human as Aleph's hope) but he seems to want Aleph to save herself. And it's absolutely heartbreaking to see Aleph willing to stay there with him. The depth of her love for him is becoming more and more apparent with each chapter.

Anyway, wonderful writing!!

Hhm, the story gets deeper by the minute. I can't wait till something is explained or revealed! *bounces*


keep 'em coming!

Excellent novel.

I'm so glad you have the key maker in this story. Like I've probably said before... he was such an underused character... he had so much potential.. and I'm so happy that your fleshing out a very neat character.

*Happy Dance* Another great chapter! The last line was cool ^_^

This was a very interesting chapter to me. I am so used to the other settings of this story that this sudden intro of a new character startling . . . in a good way.

So when the Keymaker makes a key, he is also making the door?

I really like how you've characterized the Keymaker. He always seemed an odd character in the small part he had in the movies, so you're depiction of him seems spot on. I like how he knows he can escape but just doesn't see the point. I don't know if it was intentional, but to me it seems to set up a contrast to the "freedom is all important" mentality of the resistants.

Anxiously awaiting the next chapter!

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Wow.
I remember reading the first two chapters a couple years ago. At the time I was 15, maybe 16, and completely confused by the story (obviously) and decided not to touch it. I have been receiving updates on it in my E-mail and stuff, but I never went back to check it out. Then a couple of days ago I decided on a whim to look at a bunch of stories that I read when I was younger. When I came to this one I was so surprised to see that you were still working on it. In fact, it blew my mind. So many people from this fandom have just... disappeared.
Your story is mind blowing! You are an excellent writer! Your story is complex, interesting and is a beautiful example of what fanfiction can be. What it is capable of accomplishing.
I very much look forward to your next chapter ^_^
I find I am rather sad though... I remember enjoying the Agent Smith Community and the countless websites for fans of the trilogy but... now to go looking for those things again and find my hands empty, find the fans and all the stories that were posted on those sites just seemed to have vanished into the vastness of the web... well, I guess it just kind of makes me sad that we lost all of that.
I'm sorry... I'm such a downer! lol!
Keep up your epic work! You've truly taken my breath away!

I just had a thought . . .

I was trying to figure out who the figure in white could be that Smith fights with on the bridge. It can't be Neo because Aleph doesn't recognize him as the man she saw in the file. The same goes for the Frenchman. So I was trying to think of who else could fit that description with the specific mention of wearing white. Could it be the architect? He is the other major player who wears white.

Great chapter! In the world of Smith: "MORE!"

:)

Hurray! another chapter! Though, I think I'm going to have to re-read this story again someday, since I can't remember all the details ^__^;

anyways, I'm glad the Keymaker is here, I liked his character, and I wanted to learn more about him.


good job, as always :)

Wow - didn't see that coming though the evidence pointed otherwise. Its incredible that nearly 2 years later, Aleph's characterization suffered no dearth in depth and development. The crosstalk between Aleph and her sister was a tad disturbing.

Great update.

Woot!! Another chapter!

I love this one. Even though its not Aleph/Smith centered, it has a nice little flashback that's just as full of tension (sexual and otherwise) as all their other encounters. I think its interesting that Aleph admits that she could have gone on the attack when he slipped up and admitted such a personal thing, but she didn't use it against him. I also like how you are dancing the line between pro-resistants, and pro-hey-what's-really-so-different-in-the-lives-of-those-unaware?
I believe Aleph called it a "blasted awareness". I also LOVE how she basically curses at him and he does nothing to her. If anyone else did that, they may not be dead, but they'd certainly endure some unpleasant experience.

I am really interested in the Keymaker. Partly because I'm not computer savvy enough to have understood exactly what he was doing in the movies so I'm hoping you'll help me understand somehow :)

I was so not expecting Lucy to say what she said to Aleph - "If it wasn't for you I wouldn't have died" :O That came out of left field. But I loved it!!

Looking forward to the next chapter!!

Hey, just wanted to check in and see how everything is coming along. Not pressuring you or anything, I'm just kinda bored so I figured I'd write and see if your writing was going smoothly.