you could have genma and soun go and get nodoka and tell her what the amazons have done to her child a battlr between mother and daughter or will nodoka go over to there side with her veiws of honnor. or will she show her daughter how to control the males from behind the sceans.

verey interting story you have here. keep it up

Though I can't take this story at all seriously, I doubt that I was supposed to anyway. It is extremely funny, one of the best parody/farces I've seen in a very long time. Keep up the good work, and you might get more feedback if you allow anonymous reviews (it's a setting you have to change in your profile).

Oh dear lord, this was so funny I nearly wet myself from laughing so hard. Please continue as soon as you can...

I LOVE THIS CHAPTER! Nice fighting.

Great start.

This is silly and fun. I would recommend going back and filling in more info about the things she was doing while she was in the tribe.

Congratulation you just won the calamite's strange story award. Yes I found your story really takes the cake. I soon as I come up with an award which will not be money i think it will be another review for your next chapter.

I be wait for the next chapter.

Calamite

This story has some interesting ideas, however like many of the story's I've been running across here lately, it is highly over summarized. The first chapter alone should have easily taken up 70 words or so. I know you probably wanting to get the meat of the story, but by skimping on the details you left nothing really filling behind for the readers to enjoy.

I'll give you the same advice I been giving others: Treat what you have as an outline and go back and fill in the details. You don't have to do a day-by-day account of Ranma's life, but more would be appreciated and it will help flesh out Ranma's character.

Because of the lack of character development, it is hard to see and really understand what kind of relationship Neko (Ranma) has with her tribal sister Shampoo. You just have a description of what they are doing, but not how they think and feel when they are doing it. By *showing* us how they think and feel when interacting, their relationship become more "real".

Also, is it really necessary for Neko (Ranma) to say "Mew" at the end of every sentence? This repetition is fast becoming annoying.

Good luck and keep writing!