I just read all six chapters of this; it's really cute. I love your Miroku and his view of Sango, it's so sweet and very true to him. I think chapter six was my favorite part just because we got to see all the more complex facets of his character. And I love Miroku's humor infused throughout. Don't suppose there's a Sango version in the works? :)

Aw kawaii

Beautiful Nita-sama, you certainly have a way of bringing out the emotions in characters with such startling detail and it never ceases to amaze me. Now if only I could still persuade you to do another Akira&Tomoe based fic, hmm. *rubs chin thoughtfully*

AH, THE EPISODE I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR HAS COME. >.< SWEET. ^^

-clears throat- You have captured Miroku's feelings so perfectly in this little chapter and it shows how much he truly cares for Sango.
When he first saw Kuranosuke, I was so engrossed with it and how he feelings were as he noticed Sango blushed and such. This was so great except for when Kagome intervened...

Even though I don't like Kagome at all, much like an undying passion, this was probabaly where I felt like slapping her profusely. Honestly, I understand that she was trying to help out her friends but that blow to Miroku was low... And with every line she said, I flinched as much as the houshi would. -_-
And they say she's sensitive; the girl needs to be more respectful, it actually isn't Miroku's place to say what Sango should have since her decisions ARE her own, and so is what goes on her head (and a hot headed one at that ^-^)
Geez Sango's the coolest... I can never decide between her and Kikyo, it's always an indisputable tie.

Anyhow, back to not rambling, I didn't mind that it was a year, this chapter was long and excellant with it's wording and POV. I'll patiently await next chapter, Ninalee-chan. ^-^

Well... this is interesting. Sometimes I think you're just looking for excuses to show that Miroku thought of Sango as 'more than a friend' even though, at this point, Miroku is just realizing he cares about Sango as a companion. There is no evidence in canon to support any of this, I don't think Miroku really understands his own feelings for Sango quite yet.

At the same time, however, I can really feel the emotions in how the characters interact, especially from Miroku's perspective. Your writing portrays emotions and feelings deeply beyond the surface, and it really draws the reader in.

Some of the dialogue was taken directly from the episode, and I can tell it was the dub version. That was rather amusing.

[Whatever her reason, Sango wanted to be with me and I… with her. It did not matter that I was a lecher, fabricator, a womanizer; the taijiya saw something in me that most overlooked and I felt worthy of her feelings.]

Interesting comment near the end. It's not so much that Miroku has a crush or, at the least, affectionate feelings for Sango; it's that Sango made the decision to stay with him despite the uncertain future together.

I think a statement like that made all the difference in this story.

~ Iggy ~

MORE! lol.

~Ana

Nice job

o wow...plz update!i like this alot!

Yay!! I've been on an Avatar: The Last Airbender fandom craze recently, so when I got this alert, I was all...what?! Not Zuko?!
Lol...You've reminded me why I fell in love with Miroku in the first place. Great job.

Just great, love it

Wow. It was like an alternate episode or something. Eh, kinda early in the series to be thinking about this stuff, but I actually liked it a lot. Especially the part of Miroku telling his story while he wasn't looking at Koharu. Good detail. Until Next Time...

Oh dear... Ninalee-chan... :wails: Where was your brain when you typed this out? (Okay, so it wasn't that horrible... but still.)

Let me start by saying that I rarely ever do reviews for the Inuyasha fandom anymore, as the MS portion of the series has bored me to death. But I saw your update in my Inbox and I decided to go for it. I admit I was curious. Perhaps I would get an intake of fluff...?

(Nope. Seriousness of a situation, instead.)

You can do better than us. Methinks you typed this entire thing out in one shot - which wouldn't be surprising - but then uploaded it. I'm not sure if you actually did that or not, but if you did, you shouldn't have. You should always wait a day or two, revise it, then uploaded it to ensure that there are as little mistakes as possible.

Do you want to know what gave me the impression that you rushed this? (Even if you didn't, and I have no way of knowing right now, it still seems like you did so) The plot itself wasn't actually rushed, as it was based off of a few episodes. It was almost like you weren't paying attention... almost.

For example in one of the first dialogue sentences, you have this:

["Is something wrong," I approached Inuyasha and Sango.]

First off, Miroku is asking a question. A question always ends with a question mark unless it's a vehement exclamation in the form of a question. Eg. "How dare you say that!" she screamed at me.

A couple of things caught my attention, the whole grammatical issue and punctuation errors. ("It is you, master Miroku," she opened her arms wide and ran to me, "you've returned!")

Suggestion: "It is you, Master Miroku." She opened her arms wide. {there is no direct dialogue transition to confirm that she is saying those words, like in "said, replied, stated, etc", only the action of her opening her arms. Hence, you end with a period}.

["Uh... I take it we've met in the past." I said holding her at distance]

A dialogue does not end with a period because it is not the end of a sentence. You are merely transiting the dialogue to the person who is saying it, so you still need a comma. You've done this accurately before, many times... :looks confused:

[I returned her hugged] Watch out for those evil typos. Check your work a bit more carefully, ne?

[Sango was silent; I was afraid to look her way, but could imagine her expression. It appeared my past was catching up with me and at such a fragile point in our relationship. I had spent a great deal of time trying to have her comfortable with me, and this would surely set back my progress with the taijiya.] Good speculation.

[I would be leaving soon and this young girl was left behind to endure the appointed hardships. Was I wrong to give her hope, to inspire her to dream of something more?] A considerable statement on Miroku's part. Part truth, part defence. Nicely done.

[Not only would her life be in constant danger, but it could also cause a permanent rift between Sango and me.] I think Miroku would be more afraid of her wrath than losing her friendship at this point in time. After all, it's his first encounter with Koharu... only about 10 episodes after she really confirms that she will continue travelling with the group, so Miroku hasn't had all that much time to build up much a relationship with her, let alone worry about how it will affect her. Okay, that made no sense. What I'm trying to say is... how can he worry about a rift between him and Sango when there isn't much there yet but mutual acquaintenance forced by Naraku's doing? (when he destroyed her village) At this point she is only travelling to exact revenge, and she puts up with him because he is part of the group. Yes, Miroku may be attracted to her, but they do not have much of a friendship until their lives are in danger. That is when they truly become aware of the potential risk for sacrifice and companionship.

As for Miroku's thoughts, you should have put them in Italics. It makes them more easy to differentitate from the original structure of the storyline.

[Life with the demon slayer would not be a nicely prepared hot meal or an awaiting bath, as Koharu had provided. The taijiya would not cater or submit to me simply because I was her husband, unlike Koharu.]

Um, I understand that you're extending past the basics for the episode... but Miroku had no intention for his future until he was certain that Naraku could be defeated. That's why he never asked Sango THE question until ep 132, as we both know. He hadn't even been thinking of her as more than a friend until -she- brought it up, and even then he was reluctant to admit it, to recognize the growing feelings between them for what they were.

[Looking again at the lovely warrior, I knew I needed her. She needed me also, although she would not admit it.] Maybe in a battle sense. I repeat what I said above.

Honestly, I think this chapter should have been set for a more advanced spot along in the series. Perhaps around Mount Hakurei or a bit sooner... but this whole "my life belonged to Sango" seems to be going a bit far for so early in the series.

But seeing as you have the subbed episodes, I'll leave that up for you to judge. Let me know what you think regarding this review, please.

(PS. It wasn't horrible, Ninalee-chan, but there were definitely some things that could have been spotted with a little more time. Your characterization is for the most part accurate, and the whole jealousy/future with Koharu setting thing is appropriate.)

I enjoyed this, a lot. Do you plan on doing more? SO many moments to add character POV to!

I think this was a good idea. Always did speculate on what was going through Miroku's mind when he first saw Sango, etc... Hope you continue. Keep up the good work.

Interesting...I like the idea of Miroku being totally in love at first sight. Most fanfic writers have to tweak Miroku's thoughts to get him to accept that...I'm interested in how you'll make your version of Miroku respond according to the events in the Kuranosuke episode. Keep it up!

Very cute! :-)