love it xx

i must say i am disapointed in the ending... it all went too fast...

i love the whole Godfather like theme but if it was more drawn out it would have been better... there was just no theme to it like in The Godfather...

omg. i was totally think about writing a story like this!

i'm like on a Godfather addiction! how random is that considering that The Godfather is like from the 40's and im from the early 90's... lol...

awsome! gonna have to read the rest!

Ok I think that the first chapter of the fic was really good ^_^. But after that it kinda went down hill. I think you just need to try have more background with the characters. The way you had some of the characters talk kinda reminded me of something from a historic novel try to make the dialogue more up to date. I think that you have great potential to be a wonderful writer and with time you will be ^_^ don't give up and let the idiots with mean comments get you down keep up the good work =D

It started out good then just went bad. The last chapter was bad...You couild have written it better...Like had a twist to it. Whatever...

Bye...

ok

Absolute crap.

This is Major parody! It's spoofy-ness made me laugh so much. It was silly and at times, it was too much and it ** me off. Overall, it was okay.

yeah..umm maybe you should take up parody's no offence but this is kinda ridiculous.

Okay so yeah...for a parody it was really good. But if that isn't what you meant for it to be then here are some ideas I came up with while reading it:

1. The first chapter was the best in my opinion. After that it seemed rushed and like you didn't really care what was happening with the story. Next time take your time with it and develop the plot and characters some more.

2. The use of "big" words may confuse some of the readers and that could cause them to give up on it.

3. The way you kept saying that they were British and the way you would have the characters repeat the thoughts they just had was a little wierd..

If this was a parody then ignore all of the suggestions. I look forward to reading more of your stuff.

It seems so like...stiff.
People DONT talk like that. Ever. Never Ever.

Oh this was SUCH a good story!

I'm glad Draco and Hermione finally ran away together. And that Neville got impaled, he had it coming to him.

this story sucks !

I think it started off great, I was so into it, and then it went a little silly but that was still good - it made me laugh, and now its back to being good. It's an interesting story because it was serious in the beginning. Anywayz Carry on

okay... i liked the first chapter, but it kinda went down after that, but instead of being cruel like many of the other email/reviews. i have some ideas that i think make it more believable and less of a parody. unless that's what you wanna it to be. anyway on with the ideas. i like your plot idea, it's a good orginal idea. but i feel you rushed it. small changes and more serious tone in a sense could help. you could make her seemly unknown about the who mob thing, then make the first chapter, (toward the end be when she finds out) she being confused and a lil scared tells harry and ron. okay then they over reacted (they are good for that) that's where Draco and Nevile come in, they can be involve in the Ganger's mob connects in the magic world or whatever. that's up to you. but i hope that this helps a little. i think it would make it smoother and more serious. well i wish you luck, happy holidays.