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| XxIntoTheDarknessxX 2005-11-18 ch 24,  | abuselol good luck with your eye i have to wear glasses because of the t.v. anyway great chapter update soon XXNEWMIKEXX GREAT STORY |
| Dr.D76567 2005-11-11 ch 24, | abuseGreat chapter! ^_^ Excellent combat action, glad to see Kari's back... Anyway, take you're time on the next chapter! Thanks! ^_^ |
| Gennai's Apprentice 2005-10-11 ch 1, | abuseInteresting story you got so far. Pulled me in with the whole military aspect, I'm a sucker for those. I'll be sure to read some more. |
| minijew 2005-10-02 ch 23, anon. | abusei think the story is great but it is taking way to bloody long for you to create this next chapter |
| XxIntoTheDarknessxX 2005-08-20 ch 23, | abusegreat story as usual i hope u tell why the dark masters are kidnapping digidestined!! anyway update soon XXNEWMIKEXX WITH YOU UNTIL THE END |
| Dr.D76567 2005-08-20 ch 23, | abuseYes, another great chapter! Can't wait to see what happens the next day with the B-52's coming toward the school! Until next time! ^_^ |
| XxIntoTheDarknessxX 2005-08-14 ch 22, | abusegreat chapter update soon xxnewmikexx |
| Dr.D76567 2005-08-12 ch 22, | abuseAH! :O Cliffhanger! Pleasse, update this soon, or i'll be droven insane! |
| Dr.D76567 2005-08-07 ch 21, | abuseYeah, nothing like mindless shooting! ^_^ Great chapter, can't wait to see what happens in chapter 22 with both Kari's and Gatomons rescue and Emma's treatment. Update soon! |
| XxIntoTheDarknessxX 2005-08-05 ch 21, | abusecant wait to see what happens i hope you update soon its a great story xxnewmikexx |
| Haichi 2005-08-02 ch 20, | abuseWhoops, the system logged me out for that last review. Oh, and by the way, I forgot to saracstically remark that this story couldn't possibly become more convoluted, can it? It seems that all the younger digidestined, with exception to T.K., are in league with the Dark Master, truth be guessed, Davis is the great director of all the chaos. Who knows? :P -Haichi321 |
2005-08-02 ch 20, anon. | abuseYou did a much better job. Of course there were still some scattered typos, but no one's expecting you to be perfect: especially at the rate that you're churning these things out. There was one line in particular that just sounded-- funny. "However, no one was here." The word, "there" would seem the proper choice. If you read this chapter all the way through and then come to this line, it probably would sound awkward to you. On a concluding note: I'm assuming that "Maybe it's not so bad after all..." is a thought from Gatomon. Becuase if it isn't then instead of saying, "it's not," you should say "it wasn't." This maintains the tense of your writing and makes it less confusing to the reader. (at least to some of us) :P -Haichi321 |
| Dr.D76567 2005-08-02 ch 20, | abuseAh, the plot thickens. Another great chapter. Update soon! |
| XxIntoTheDarknessxX 2005-08-01 ch 20, | abusegood story alot of action update soon xxnewmikexx |
| Dr.D76567 2005-07-30 ch 19, | abuseWow three of my favorite fics were updated today (two of them ending). What luck! Anyway, another great chapter. Again, you brewed up more suspense at the end of the chapter. And I STILL want to know who the blue haired guy is! Update Soon! ^_^ |