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| HeartlessRomantic 2005-08-06 ch 4, | abuseit was really good! Yeah...that is about all I have to say... |
| Davmi LaSav 2005-07-08 ch 4, | abuseIt's been a month. Are you going to keep us hanging or update? I want to know how this ends! |
| Alexia S. Luclwit 2005-06-09 ch 4, | abuseYep. I love you, just as much as ever. I put this on my update list, as are your other chapters, and will try to keep up with it. :D |
| Alexia S. Luclwit 2005-06-09 ch 2, | abuseO. I think I'm beginning to figure this one out! Let's see... |
| Alexia S. Luclwit 2005-06-09 ch 1, | abuse“Let me get a better look at you,” he said, pulling off his horned goblin mask. “What you really mean is ‘since you look so pretty, let me mess you up a bit,’” she laughed, but carefully untied her mask and removed it. She raised an eyebrow and twirled around in place. I loved your intro, and several instances after that. I really like this: Besides, Jareth had immediately vowed, deep down inside the heart that she swore he did not have, that this woman would not get her child back. Not once did I ever think that Jareth lacked a heart. I love him to death, and this is one of the reasons why. Awesome first chapter! Now I have to read the following!! |
| alorindanya 2005-06-04 ch 4, | abuseWhat I meant in my previous review was...well, with a mindset that "the GK had fallen in love with the girl", Jareth MIGHT have been leading Sarah on, giving his attentions to another while his wife watched from the sidelines (even though he would be doing it for her). This is such an interesting take on the story, I can't help but to wait for more! |
| dreamlabyrinth 2005-06-03 ch 4, | abuseReally, you have me totally torn here. On one hand, I'd love to see Sarah decide differently and end up with Jareth, but on the other hand I want Olwyn to get her human form back, and I know neither is going to happen, at least not until the end of the movie as we know it. I loved how you put Olwyn into that scene. We actually don't see Jareth change into an owl until much later, and even then we can't be sure it's really him and not another being, so that works perfectly. |
| shatterdheart 2005-05-28 ch 3, | abuseWhoa! I love your story! So is Jareth going to save his wife. And since sarah looks like his wife, will he get sarah confused with Olwyn. Will Olwyn get jealous and do something to sarah. Or will Olwyn leave jareth. Will sarah and Jareth end up together. Or will you stop your story where the moive stops. Your story can so many places. I can't to read the next chapter. update soon! ja ne |
| Bookangel 2005-05-28 ch 3, anon. | abuseInteresting. . . very interesting. I look forward to more of your tale, Jareth. ;) |
| dreamlabyrinth 2005-05-28 ch 3, | abuse*applause* Oh, wonderful. You've written out the beginning of the movie in a way that it still seems new and exciting, no matter how often I've watched it. I'm really waiting for more. :-) |
| alorindanya 2005-05-22 ch 2, | abuse"No matter the means..." Oh no. I hope this doesn't mean what I think it means but...it must be done. Anyway, what an inventive side of the story you have going here! I really love it. |
| alorindanya 2005-05-22 ch 1, | abuseWOW! What a brilliant concept of where the Owl came from!! |
| dreamlabyrinth 2005-05-20 ch 2, | abuseWow, that is wonderful. So Olwyn is the owl that watches Sarah in the beginning of the movie. Hm, but we know that Jareth fails to secure Toby as his heir, so it seems that this is doomed from the outset. I hope he'll tell you more, this looks very interesting. :-) |
| Indigo Spirit 2005-05-17 ch 2, | abuseThis looks cool so far. I can't wait for more. |