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Live2Review
2007-04-10 . chapter 5
hey i
<3dracoHECKYES (not real name)
2007-04-09 . chapter 1
just wanted to say i
Blackie-San
2006-11-25 . chapter 1
I have one question for you about this chapter: Is Percy still in her family?and is he even in the Order, because the last time we heard from him, he hated everything that had to do with Harry and Dubmledore...very goos do far otherwise...
Ebony Secrets
2005-08-23 . chapter 4
Alrighty, a few things again...

I didn't review for chapter 3 due to a lack of things to say, but it is Legilimency, not Legimance.

This chapter was indeed short, but a few other things take precedence:

A. I don't think it would be possible to die from a few minutes of the Cruciatus curse, though insanity is a definite possibility. In the Goblet of Fire, a spider was put under it for around a minute and was only twitching when it was lifted.

B. A Death Eater probably would torture a baby, or anything else it got its hands on, and even if they wouldn't, Voldemort would for sure. (You know, tried to kill Harry as a baby?) Though, if you didn't want to write that to lessen the grusome reality of the situation, I can understand why.

Ah, I did ramble a bit there. I'd love if this story got a good amount of dark humor from Draco, but I'm not sayin' change a bloomin' thing, 'cause it's your story and my observations are well-meant and can be incorporated or ignored with my best wishes! ^_^
Ebony Secrets
2005-08-23 . chapter 2
Normally, I don't approve of first person fics, but I do like how you've written Ginny's slightly cynical view of life. It's too early to decide if I really like Draco, but I'm sure I will, based on this one line that I loved:
"I wonder if I must worship him in Hell."
I actually laughed out loud on that one, just because it fit the type of realistic/negative/stoic attitude that I think anyone in Draco's position would have developed. Be careful you don't make him too kind, however; no matter how much he'd ever cared for Ginny, one girl is not enough to change the way a person has been raised.
Excellent job with grammar and such! It annoys me to no end to see several mispellings within a few chapters, and it will cause most people to stop reading a story, so bravo for the amazing spell-checker!

Keep up the good work!
~Jess
Sallymander
2005-05-21 . chapter 4
Awesome story! I like it! Update soon!
POTC Freak
2005-05-21 . chapter 4
Hahaha! I LOVE the DE thing... It's cool! ^_^ And congrats on getting lots of reviews so fast! Lucky! Anyways, nice chapter, and HURRY AND WRITE MORE! I still have to finish chapter 6, though...
~Becki
shou ji
2005-05-21 . chapter 4
well, first of all: thanks for the update!
i am hoping for a bit more D/G in future chapters, but i like that you give a lot of background information. i especially like that draco isnt good- because i cant really imagine that. and know all i cand o is to wait for the next update;-)
tennistar514
2005-05-20 . chapter 4
sorry, im not logged in... anyway, great chapter! i think the portraying of draco is pretty accurate, and i like it. just one thing... i think death eaters would still torture little babies, because if they can torture little children, i dont think they have the kindness to spare babies. anyway, great chapter and update soon!
Inherent
2005-05-17 . chapter 3
This is pretty good! I like Draco Death Eater fics.
POTC Freak
2005-05-17 . chapter 3
Hahaha! I LOVE the comment that you said about me in the beginning.. Wow, you posted a LOT of what you have already! I'm impressed! ^_^ I can't wait to read what you have next. Nice reivews already!! I wish mine was that good. Half of mine are from people that I know.. Anyways, nice story, and nice fast posting! WRITE MORE! ^_^
tenniStar514
2005-05-17 . chapter 3
aw.. this is such a cutesy story!! i love it! great job! update really really soon!
shou ji
2005-05-17 . chapter 3
Hey, excellent! I love it. loved their first encounter after 5 years- i think it was realistic, and i could really feel the way they are feeling. wonderful. keep it up, i cant wait for the next update!
Nyah1
2005-05-17 . chapter 3
I like it very much although I think that the first encounter between Draco and Ginny after 5 years was really weird. I would have thought it would be different. But nevertheless, I like it :)
Blonde-gym-chick
2005-05-17 . chapter 3
I really like this story. I think you did a good job describing Ginny and Draco and you also made them seem human. Also, their relationship from before and now not being able to have one even though they want it was a good idea. I cant wait to read the next chapter, keep it up.
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