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| DragonGolem 2006-04-26 ch 2, anon. | abuse::salutes sharply:: It's a good work in progress but I do have a few complaints. You need scene breaks or at the very least more transition words. Explanations can take time but really its better if your audience can understand your work. Those are my only complaints and I hope they were relatively painless. Ja ne |
| Innortal 2005-05-17 ch 1,  | abuseI must say it is interesting, I can't wait to see where you go with this. Innortal |