I thought you did a great job of combining the two universes. At first it seemed Peter's speech was a bit too adult, but he's been around a long time, after all, and his vocabulary was bound to improve. I liked the way you made Neverland darker, matching it a bit more with the Buffyverse.

This is a beautiful story. The plot is wonderful in the "begets wonder" sense, though it's wonderful in the awesome sense, too. Good job!

interesting story. wierd things happen wen u wath a movie to many times...but i like ur writing. been waiting on creed for a while actually, HINT HINT. but really, cool story.

This's good. Occasionally I get annoyed with fics that deal with the movie Peter Pan rather than the book, but this was pretty neat. And the comparison between Buffy and Peter was great.

Great story, Shaw :D I loved it the first time I read it, and now that I've read it a few more times, I still love it! Very creative, very well written. It's a shame Buffy couldn't have stayed a bit longer, huh? But then again, like you said, Neverland isn't what she expected it to be. :) Wonderful job! Big Kudos!

Now that was awesome. I may have to come begging for permission to collect on the inspiration this story has given me...

wow. that was such an interesting crossover. you blended the two genres really well. i'm very impressed. great job. i only wished it was a little more fleshed out and longer. great job though!

Great story. You have captured the wonder of Neverland and Buffy. THis is well written and well paced. Great characterization and plot, no monsters but instead Indians, Pirates and of course, Fairies.

Okay... well... I liked parts of it. The happy thoughts parts of the story actually were more vivid than the darkness -- which lacked 5 senses details.

I think I understand that since Buffy was an adult, she couldn't remember her visit to Neverland.

As the reader, I really didn't like being "kept in the dark" quite as much as Buffy was as to what was going on.

On technique you might try is to have some dialogs around her that she only barely hears or understands, but because it is writing we can make out an idea of what might be going on around her.

A little disjointed, but with some bright spots.

I like it.

Hey chick, i take it this is going to be a one off story, although it would have made a nice longer one aswell.

It is really sweet, especially how you explained her life now without going into too much unnessesary details. I especially enjoyed the climbing the clif incident, and the thinking of killing peter allowing her to fly, just the little comments she kept making made me giggle.

The beggining confused me though, as i wondered if it was the second chapter of somthing, but it does keep the reader interested, and make them carry on reading to find out what happened, or it could just be me who doesnt like being confused.

I'm going to go now, great story, xx chicklepea